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redwriter1
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0 posted 10-14-1999 01:36 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for redwriter1

The day he cryed
on my shoulder like a little boy
the tears burned my skin
and I held him as close as I could

Tightly, firmly, warmly
then gently held his head in my lap
and stroked his hair
saying "ssshhhhh"..

but I didn't really mean it
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Tara Simms
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1 posted 10-14-1999 02:24 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Very tender, Redwriter. I don't see you posting much these days.

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It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
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redwriter1
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2 posted 10-14-1999 07:02 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

Thank you for missing me

I've just been working on lyrics and songs and didn't want to bother the room (since it's not poetry, per say)



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**A dream is a wish your heart makes :)

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 10-14-1999 08:28 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

red.....this is really tender. I like to see a man cry, it tells me they feel. I for one se no difference between lyrics and poetry, please do share
Watcher666
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4 posted 10-15-1999 04:42 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Nicely done.I liked the feelings here.

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Balladeer
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5 posted 10-15-1999 05:46 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

It's always good to see you, Red, no matter what style you're using. Welcome back.
Beki
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6 posted 10-15-1999 05:52 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

I really liked this, until the last line...that such comfort would be false, especially for a man whose nature it is not to be so vulnerable. I have a friend, whom I was always close to but who became infinitely closer after I held him weeping in my arms at another friends' funeral. There is something about the bond that experience created that is very unique and special. Without the last line this poem could have been speaking of that.
redwriter1
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7 posted 10-15-1999 09:56 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

Beki.. the point is..
when I said.. "shhhh".. (as in be quiet)
I really didn't mean it.. I didn't mean for him to be quiet..
It's an automatic nurturing response.

and thank you Balladeer.. nice to see you too.. (smile)
Denise
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8 posted 10-16-1999 07:33 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful! This is so sweet!

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