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I Love you......(comments please)

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Deverone
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since 10-13-1999
Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA


0 posted 10-14-1999 01:31 AM       View Profile for Deverone   Email Deverone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Deverone

This was originally written when I had a Love to share. Some words have slightly changed to show different times.


A week in our lives
I will always cherrish.

The cold wind howled outside.
A white powder filled the air.
Temperatures well below freezing.

Snuggled in bed
finding each others warmest parts.
Hiding under the blankets
away from work and play.
Just knowing you were close to me
made me feel so wonderful.
Making due with what we had
in front of the warm fireplace.
You laying against me
and I against you;
and I knew that you appreciated
and loved me with all your heart.

These few days play over
in my waking thoughts
and my sleeping dreams.


I Loved you.


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Deverone

My wife and I are divorcing....all I can do is hold this one "perfect" week we had in my memories. She is special but my heart cannot take the pain from her.

[This message has been edited by Deverone (edited 10-14-1999).]

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Isis
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since 09-06-99
Posts 6390
Sunny Queensland


1 posted 10-14-1999 02:10 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Nice but I don't quite understand, have you split with her, or just back at work?
If you are just back at work you could have ended it with something like , 'I know those few days will be a carbon copy of the future waiting for me and you.' That's a crappy line, but something loving for the future you know? You wanted a comment, well you got one.. Email me if you wish to talk about it further..

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How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


2 posted 10-14-1999 08:50 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I think this is a beautiful poem, splitting up can be so hard when there are feeling as deep as these involved. No, one can not take away anothers pain, try as we might, we can only at best hope to share the burdens and make the pain a bit milder. I wish you well
Denise
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3 posted 10-18-1999 10:07 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful, Deverone. Some things in this life are worth treasuring!

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Denise
 
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