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Love's FLight (An attempt at a Villanelle from Nan's class)

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hoot_owl_rn
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I'd just like to say thanks to Nan for her patience in teaching us this form of poetry. I found it to be a challange and am not sure form poetry is for me as my words seem stunted when I write like this, but here is my humble attempt.)

Love's Flight (A Villanelle)

Drawn to her love's sweet light
Once caged, now is set free
She spreads her wings in flight

Within the depths of night
Where blind, she now can see
Drawn to her love's sweet light

There bathed in clouds of white
In skies above the sea
She spreads her wings in flight

Life dim, now shinning bright
No longer lost she'll be
Drawn to her love's sweet light

His love has won the fight
Released and now set free
She spreads her wings in flight

Eyes opened in his sight
Her soul released, set free
Drawn to her love's sweet light
She spreads her wings in flight



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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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1 posted 10-13-1999 10:23 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well Hoot, I think you did a humbley terrific job on this! This was great! Oops, shh! I forgot about that class. Thanks for the reminder.
Ohme
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2 posted 10-13-1999 10:59 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

I like the form. Is that a cyber class or do real people get together?

Ohme
Mike
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3 posted 10-13-1999 11:00 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Very nice, I enjoyed. You are a very talented poet.
Nicole
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Hoot, I don't think this sounds stunted at all. A challenge this may have been, but you completed it beautifully!
hoot_owl_rn
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Thanks everyone and although it's nice to attempt these formats from time to time, I think I'll stick to what comes out naturally

Ohme...a cyber class here on Passions...check out Poetry Workshop
Seymour Tabin
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Hoot,
You did very well, don't think I could have done better.
Nan
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LOL - The stunted part is all your imagination, Ruth - It doesn't appear such at all - That's the real challenge....Hehe...
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hoot, liked it a lot, you did good girl
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Well written Hoot.....enjoyed this much....

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I've been checking into the class as I can and have enjoyed reading everyone's learning process.

I think you've made a wonderful first attempt, and hopefully you will regale us with future efforts.

As Nan says, this is not stunted at all; you are must missing the freedom of "regular speech", as you do so well in your regular works, but I like this very, very much.
Michael
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11 posted 10-14-1999 06:49 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Beautifully done, Hoot,
Well written, touching.
btw thanks for your help on mine.

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Michael Anderson

When God puts a tear in your eye,
He puts a rainbow in your heart.



Denise
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Absolutely beautiful, Hoot! And I agree, it doesn't seem stunted at all!

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Denise
hoot_owl_rn
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Seymore...coming from you, that is high praise

Nan...thanks again for your instructions, you're a good teacher

I love it and pepper...thank you both

Sunshine...thanks, give it a try sometime

Michale...thanks and no need to thank me, that's what the class was for

Denise...thank you
Watcher666
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Well done verse! Sweet and meaningful poem Dear Lady.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
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This was positively uplifting ... I enjoyed reading it the second time even more than the first. It is quite obvious that these sentiments came from your heart, and I have always held that the heart is the birthing-place of the greatest poetry every created.

Just take the "an attempt at" out of the thread topic, and this will be perfect! ("Attempt" suggests that you failed, which you most certainly did not; your form is very well-done)

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

hoot_owl_rn
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Watcher...thank you very much

Nochtdraco...you are far too kind, thank you

Marilyn
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I have always enjoyed your work and it has always touched my heart. This piece is no exception. It flows smoothly and it isn't stunted in the least. I enjoyed watching this piece come together and I an looking forward to more of Nan's classes. I hope to see you there as well.
hoot_owl_rn
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Marilyn, unless she throws me out, I'll be there and thanks
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