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Gone but not gone ( An acrostic )

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 10-13-1999 12:19 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Gone but not gone ( An acrostic )

Loss of sound does havoc my hear
She is gone.
Out is the sun there is no sight.
She is gone.
Vacant is serenity's touch
She is gone.
Every desire is tasteless
She is gone.
I see the flowers without smell
She is gone.
So in my mind she must remain
Although gone.
Gone but a phantom in my brain.
Although gone.
Out among the stars she appears
Although gone.
Nought in the light she disappears.
Although gone.
Everywhere to my five senses,
She is gone, but to me not gone.


[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 10-13-1999).]
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Ohme
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1 posted 10-13-1999 12:23 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Worst kind of gone there is, huh?

No question. It certainly delivers the message.

Ohme
Pepper
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very sad and very beautiful
loved the read Sy

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
WhtDove
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3 posted 10-13-1999 01:04 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Interesting acrostic, every other letter.
Aww! It will come again some day! Chin up, she may be gone but we're still here! I really liked the way you did this Seymour!
Denise
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4 posted 10-14-1999 11:22 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Seymour, this is fabulous! Very ingenious!


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Denise
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Well written Seymore and oh so tragic, as an acrostic I'd like to see it done something like this though...it allows you message to ring out clearer

Loss of sound does havoc my hear
~She is gone.
Out is the sun there is no sight.
~She is gone.
Vacant is serenity's touch
~She is gone.
Every desire is tasteless
~She is gone
I see the flowers without smell
~She is gone.
So in my mind she must remain
~Although gone.
Gone but a phantom in my brain.
~Although gone.
Out among the stars she appears
~Although gone.
Nought in the light she disappears.
~Although gone.
Everywhere to my five senses,
~She is gone, but to me not gone.


Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 10-15-1999 08:54 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Ohme,
Thaank you so much for the read and comment.
Pepper,
You do me honor, thank you.
WhtDove,
It was only a mood poem but thank you for the comments.
Denise,
I can always count on you for a good word.
Hoot,
You have a wonderful idea, I did print it in bold first letters but when it printed it came up without the dark letters. thank you abain for the idea.
 
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