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Gone but not gone ( An acrostic )
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Gone but not gone ( An acrostic ) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Gone but not gone ( An acrostic ) Loss of sound does havoc my hear She is gone. Out is the sun there is no sight. She is gone. Vacant is serenity's touch She is gone. Every desire is tasteless She is gone. I see the flowers without smell She is gone. So in my mind she must remain Although gone. Gone but a phantom in my brain. Although gone. Out among the stars she appears Although gone. Nought in the light she disappears. Although gone. Everywhere to my five senses, She is gone, but to me not gone. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 10-13-1999).] |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Worst kind of gone there is, huh? No question. It certainly delivers the message. Ohme |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
very sad and very beautiful loved the read Sy ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Interesting acrostic, every other letter. Aww! It will come again some day! Chin up, she may be gone but we're still here! I really liked the way you did this Seymour! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Seymour, this is fabulous! Very ingenious!  ------------------ Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Well written Seymore and oh so tragic, as an acrostic I'd like to see it done something like this though...it allows you message to ring out clearer Loss of sound does havoc my hear ~She is gone. Out is the sun there is no sight. ~She is gone. Vacant is serenity's touch ~She is gone. Every desire is tasteless ~She is gone I see the flowers without smell ~She is gone. So in my mind she must remain ~Although gone. Gone but a phantom in my brain. ~Although gone. Out among the stars she appears ~Although gone. Nought in the light she disappears. ~Although gone. Everywhere to my five senses, ~She is gone, but to me not gone. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ohme, Thaank you so much for the read and comment. Pepper, You do me honor, thank you. WhtDove, It was only a mood poem but thank you for the comments. Denise, I can always count on you for a good word. Hoot, You have a wonderful idea, I did print it in bold first letters but when it printed it came up without the dark letters. thank you abain for the idea. |
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