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Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

0 posted 1999-10-13 03:47 AM


Ice invades my spine
I am chilled to the bone
As if by design
I’m sitting here alone

I am chilled to the bone
My muscles grow tense
I’m sitting here alone
Planning my defense

My muscles grow tense
In my chair I freeze
Planning my defense
While praying, “God please…”

In my chair I freeze
As if by design
While praying, “God please…”
Ice invades my spine


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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-10-13 04:47 AM


Good deal with the real fear my dear.

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Nothing is worse than sorrow,
except perhaps disdain.
I'll be myself tomorrow,
tonight I'll feel the pain.

DreamEvil©



Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-13 07:14 AM


Vivid imagery.I could feel your fear.Very well done!!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
3 posted 1999-10-13 09:06 AM


Again.....I like very much.
The imagery is so fine tuned!!

Great Work !

Jenny

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