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Michael
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0 posted 1999-10-13 02:32 AM


Ambivalence

Alone in darkness, donning scorn,
Shadowed beneath the rage of hate,
Curse I the day sweet Love was born.

Watch I as eyes of Love adorn.
While shine in mine doth abdicate
Alone in darkness, donning scorn.

As Jealousy holds me, forlorn,
In pains ne'er to alleviate,
Curse I the day sweet Love was born.

Emotion ravaged, I lie shorn
In barren waste, insatiate,
Alone in darkness, donning scorn.

Beset in death of Hope, in mourn
For none lest woe disseminate,
Curse I the day sweet Love was born.

Every emotion in me torn,
Affliction due the hand of Fate.
Alone in Darkness, donning scorn,
Curse I the day sweet Love was born.


Michael


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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 1999-10-13 03:34 AM


And you said I was kissing up to the teacher!
LOL...seriously though...great job on this one Michael! I really liked how it turned out! (and also glad to see the darkness of your soul still regardless of that terrible bite you've got!)

DreamEvil
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2 posted 1999-10-13 04:05 AM


Definitely Darkly and well done DarkLord.

No lost or dulled edge here, I think.

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Nothing is worse than sorrow,
except perhaps disdain.
I'll be myself tomorrow,
tonight I'll feel the pain.

DreamEvil©



Watcher666
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3 posted 1999-10-13 07:17 AM


Fabulous poem Sir,very Dark indeed!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

JennyLee
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4 posted 1999-10-13 09:04 AM


Awesome as always!!
C well met!

Jenny

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5 posted 1999-10-13 02:51 PM


Excellent in every detail.
poetFemmeFatale
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6 posted 1999-10-13 05:44 PM


Terrible bite, Christopher? Ha It's more than that ! His mind, body, and soul belong to me.....not to mention one other little tiny part I mentioned in Adult ! Need I remind you ? LOL Very nicely done, because I know how much pain and suffering you went throught to write this darn thing! I give you an "A" as your teacher......he he he Oh, I guess that's not what we're studying here, huh? Sorry.....my mind is in the gutter no matter what day it is.....(sigh) Just ask anyone that knows me !!

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 1999-10-13 09:12 PM


Michael as I've said before, this is a fine piece and knowing the level of difficulty one encounters when writing a villanelle makes me appreciate it even more.
WhtDove
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8 posted 1999-10-13 10:29 PM


What can I say? The master of the dark side is back! Well done Michael!
Nicole
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9 posted 1999-10-14 12:19 PM


Very dark, and very excellent.
Nan
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10 posted 1999-10-14 08:55 AM


Nice fan club, Michael - Ya dun gud - in spite of the teacher...
Iloveit
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11 posted 1999-10-14 10:00 AM


really like this, these villanelles are great to read, and when you go back and look to see how they are created makes them even more majestic creations

[This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 10-14-1999).]

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