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0 posted 10-11-1999 09:01 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lucie

I had a vision of a day when all the world was calm.
We journeyed through a garden, connected palm to palm.
The beauty all around us did inspire wondrous awe.
We shared this moment you and I, amazed at what we saw.

Animals that dwelt there weren’t stalking prey to eat.
The lions and the tigers lay beside the zebra’s feet.
Flowers that we saw there were like none we’d ever seen.
The mountains and the valleys in their beauty quite pristine.

A gentle river flowed between the flowers and the trees.
The smell of grass and blossoms floating to us on the breeze.
So tranquil was this calming scene that I relaxed my grip
upon the hand I held in mine, I felt my vision slip.

It seems that you were holding me in this calm paradise.
When I let go, so did you, our love was sacrificed.
I jumped from sleep to find you there beside me in the bed.
It seems I had not lost my love, it was a dream instead.

Pull me close beside you do not let me slip away.
I hope I get the chance to visit the garden again someday.
But for now I want to stay right here within your arms my love.
Until my time on earth is done and I am called above.
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1 posted 10-11-1999 10:07 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Very pretty indeed Lucie....
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2 posted 10-11-1999 01:21 PM       View Profile for Dragoness   Email Dragoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dragoness's Home Page   View IP for Dragoness

Beautiful! Well done

Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

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3 posted 10-11-1999 01:28 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Ahhhhhh....very nice, Lucie.

Thank you!

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4 posted 10-11-1999 01:58 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very nicely done Lucie, your own little garden of Eden, Utiopia.....beautiful!
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5 posted 10-11-1999 06:31 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Dear Lucie, you bring a smile to my face with this piece. I think 'tis my favorite of all your verse.

Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.

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6 posted 10-11-1999 08:17 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

I thought I was in heaven for a minute...and look at you ! You've found heaven on earth !
Wonderful poem. : )
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7 posted 10-26-1999 11:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Lucie, what a beautiful vision indeed! I loved reading this! Captivating!

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8 posted 10-26-1999 11:49 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

This sings. Thank you for this melody, Lucie.


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9 posted 10-27-1999 12:03 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Oh Lucie....this is a special piece.
Such beautiful imagery.....
I'm with DE on this being my favorite ...

A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire!
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10 posted 10-27-1999 02:00 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

You have made me laugh so hard it hurt at times. You have made me cry other times. You touch a wider range of emotion in me than most people even come close to. In all your poetry, I always see a semblance of I do in this one. I know things seem bleak sometimes, but always hang on to that hope and never lose your faith in God.
These things will all be passed soon.

Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?

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11 posted 10-27-1999 09:53 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I'm with Michael on this one - when I read your poetry, I never know what to expect ! It's always a pleasant surprise, on how you touch my emotion...You keep writing girl, use it as your release for what's bottled up inside you - you have a beautiful gift of expression !

~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale

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12 posted 10-27-1999 10:25 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Lovely, Lucie!!
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13 posted 10-28-1999 03:18 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

This is gorgeous! Very well crafted - with lots of passion.
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