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Master
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0 posted 10-11-1999 03:41 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

The morning stared into his face
So weak and jaded
The candle faded into haze
The candle faded

Upon his hands, dark stains of ink
Transformed in color
And blooming early, far from spring
The nature hollered

Outside the window, in embrace
The winds debated
The candle faded into haze
The candle faded

Behind the desk, in common stance
So full of wonder
His head lied rested on his hands
His soul in slumber

His writings in the hearth were
Neither burned nor ashen
The molten wax froze on the floor
From last night’s passion

Where tangled in a single gaze
Two fates were braided
The candle faded into haze
The candle faded

The silence crept into the room
Quick and eternal
Dim shades and shadows of his doom
Fell on his journal

The sun was rising in its place
As if inflated
The candle faded into haze
The candle faded

In memory of B. Pasternak

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I fell in love and kept on falling


[This message has been edited by Master (edited 10-12-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Dragoness
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1 posted 10-11-1999 03:48 AM       View Profile for Dragoness   Email Dragoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dragoness's Home Page   View IP for Dragoness

Like looking into one soul.Beautiful.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

Master
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2 posted 10-11-1999 01:39 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks Dragoness, I'm glad you liked it!
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 10-11-1999 02:31 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Master...well done, what a wonderful tribute
there are a few lines that don't flow as well as the rest, but other wise what a wonderful piece of work
Master
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4 posted 10-11-1999 08:38 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks Hoot, tell me which lines and I'll work on them.
U K Hero
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5 posted 10-12-1999 07:12 AM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

Sorry Master I had to read this three times before I recognised it for what it is, brilliant, Well done.
hoot_owl_rn
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Master...after reading this wonderful piece of work about a dozen times now, I take back my above comment...don't change a thing, it's wonderful!!
Master
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7 posted 10-12-1999 01:13 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks UK Hero!

Hoot, thanks for your comments, but if there's something I should change let me know, I can appreciatte any critique, especially from a great poet like you! Thanks.
passing shadows
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beautiful tribute
 
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