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Pinocchio

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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 10-10-1999 09:44 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Pinocchio

Like a puppet on a string, I lived;
he my Geppetto, always in control.
Everything guided by his moves,
my life not my own.
I could not feel.
I could not cry.
Heart inaccessible in my chest of wood.
I spent my life on a shelf,
looking down from above,
wishing only to be real.

I ran away one day,
seeking freedom,
but found myself in a world of lies
that didn’t live up to my expectations at all.
My wooden arms incapable of holding.
My wooden heart unable to love.
I hid in the circus of my mind,
put myself on display in a freak show
called Life,
and dreamed of better things.


You came to me like a fairy in my dreams,
the reality of you unbelievable.
“Grant me life,” I begged.
“Let me live once more.”
“Free me with your love.”
I drifted back off to sleep
and awoke, alive, in your arms.

My wood is now flesh;
I move without strings.


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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 10-10-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 10-10-1999 09:46 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

WOW! What creation! This is a marvellous transformation, Ruth.
DreamEvil
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2 posted 10-10-1999 09:46 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Ruth, you know what I think of this wonderful work and what I think of the Lady who penned it. Well done, my friend.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

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3 posted 10-10-1999 09:49 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Superb!
rascalx
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4 posted 10-10-1999 09:49 PM       View Profile for rascalx   Email rascalx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit rascalx's Home Page   View IP for rascalx

Absolutely beautiful..your command of decriptive prose and metaphor is amazing. Wonderful!
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5 posted 10-10-1999 09:52 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Oh, Hoot, this is beautiful! I enjoyed reading this very much!


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Denise
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6 posted 10-10-1999 09:53 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Ruth, this is your best one yet! I love this, the imagery, the story. "I hid in the circus of my mind, put myself on display in a freak show called Life"--haven't we all felt that way from time to time? You just word it so well. "I move without strings"--that line says it ALL. Excellent job, Ruth!

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It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley
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hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 10-10-1999 10:03 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Severn...thank you, the transformation in myself is perhaps my best creation to date

Dream....thanks for your opinion and support on this one and for being such a dear friend

PDV....thanks

rascalx...wow, want to do up a critique for me for my book Thanks!

denise...thank you

Tara...you reply is so kind, thank you my friend

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8 posted 10-10-1999 10:13 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I have no ready adjectives to use for this poem. Anything would sound too cheap and insufficient. I wish I had written it. Thank you, hoot.
Martie
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9 posted 10-10-1999 10:16 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Wonderful telling of the power of love.
Christopher
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10 posted 10-10-1999 10:23 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Another echo from my heart ruth, you are truly amazing!
Dragoness
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11 posted 10-10-1999 10:27 PM       View Profile for Dragoness   Email Dragoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dragoness's Home Page   View IP for Dragoness

Excellent!

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

hoot_owl_rn
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Balladeer...thank you, that says a lot

Martie...thanks, love is a powerful thing as control is a destructive force

Chris....amazing?? I think not, but thank you

Dragoness....thank you
johnt300
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13 posted 10-11-1999 01:03 AM       View Profile for johnt300   Email johnt300   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for johnt300

Perfect.
Dark Angel
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14 posted 10-11-1999 06:17 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Hoot, this is Magnificent!!! loved it

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


hoot_owl_rn
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Tyson and Dark angel, thank you both
RainbowGirl
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16 posted 10-11-1999 01:01 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Hoot: Smiles here..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Mike
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17 posted 10-11-1999 02:21 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Excellent writing.
Sunshine
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18 posted 10-11-1999 05:40 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I have to ditto 'Deer and say that I wish I had thought up this one myself. I doubt I could have done the justice to it that you did, though. Well done, Hoot!
hoot_owl_rn
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Rainbow and Mike, thank you very much

Sunshine...give yourself a bit more credit, remember, I have seen your work
Master
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20 posted 10-12-1999 06:40 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

I don't know about this one Hoot, the whole idea of puppets is kind of getting worn out. I think you can do better than this.
U K Hero
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21 posted 10-12-1999 07:02 AM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

what a delightful way of putting it across. But then again, one wood woodent one when ones in love (just a pun ). I loved it...

Seymour Tabin
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22 posted 10-12-1999 09:05 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot,
Every once in a while you surprise yourself with a poem you write and this is one of them
It could'nt have been written better a Bravo and congrads.
hoot_owl_rn
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Master...yes, quite possibly the puppet theme has been over done, but in all reality that's how I lived a better part of my life

Uk...very punny thanks

Seymore...thanks for the comment, yes, in fact this poem and the response it's gotten has surprised me, but each time I read it, and the wonderful comments by people like you, I get to like it a bit more

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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 10-12-1999).]
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24 posted 10-12-1999 09:27 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

hoot: The poem is superb, the last line a powerful statement. We've all been blessed by you gaining control of your life and your poems... Well done!!!
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