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Sunshine
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0 posted 1999-10-09 08:15 AM


Deep Within

Deep within the soul
the silent longing is there,
painfully, woefully stubborn,
making it hard to breathe
or take a deep breath.

A sensation of “reaching”
there, down deep, holding on
to the mind’s most fleeting thought,
discarding even love, for a
brief answer to agony.

How best to resolve this
indisputable emotion, that
centers itself into a pit of desire,
not for love, but for a brief
sharing of bidding well.

I know the answer, for
it has always been within me,
but there are times where I fail
to impart a sense of urgency,
and the failure pains me.

It is somewhat like a
lonesome strain of one violin,
a lingering note, reaching out for
one other to hear, understand,
beautiful in loneliness.

For to share so much
so that another is touched
by the beauty of some words,
this lingering feeling still
doesn’t let me breathe.

©KRJ
9 October, 1999


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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


© Copyright 1999 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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1 posted 1999-10-09 08:21 AM


Illuminating piece of self reflection dear Lady. Thank you.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 1999-10-09 08:42 AM


Sunshine,
Agree with DreanEvil, a wonderful piece of introspection and well done. This one is a keeper, something you can always take out and read and reflect on. *L*

Sunshine
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3 posted 1999-10-09 09:03 AM


I've reached ["touched?"] two of my most favorite critics. Thank you for your comments.
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 1999-10-10 12:25 PM


Nicely done
Denise
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5 posted 1999-10-10 12:28 PM


Yes, Sunshine, very nicely done!

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Denise

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6 posted 1999-10-10 08:18 AM


Thank you Hoot, and Denise, for reading. Do you ever feel this way?
Munda
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7 posted 1999-10-10 08:54 AM


Selfreflection: to see your true self, understand and accept, whether you like it or not. The hardest thing ever ! Thanks for sharing this.
Pepper
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8 posted 1999-10-10 08:58 AM


I ditto DE ,Sy and Munda......well done Sunshine!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

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9 posted 1999-10-11 09:20 AM


Munda and Pepper, thank you for looking in! I knew I was letting a lot out here, but I feel safe in this family...
Nan
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10 posted 1999-10-13 08:09 AM


Two thumbs up, Sunshine...
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11 posted 1999-10-13 09:07 AM


Nan, thanks for putting the ice cream with the cake...
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