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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
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0 posted 1999-10-09 05:09 AM


Compassion you've twisted into contempt.
Each kindness I give is met with malice.
Never again will I make the attempt.
Your own bitterness will fill this chalice.

No day goes by without some argument.
Each day with you provides me with fresh scars.
You've torn my soul's tender integument.
Sorrow's end has been wished on many stars.

My passion's fire has flickered and died.
All that's left are ashes and icy coals.
The flame's extinguished by the tears I cried.
Your spite holds me back from reaching my goals.

You prove my hatred of women is just.
Lord knows you do nothing to prove it wrong.
You can no longer inspire my lust.
In my arms and heart you no longer belong.


©1999 DreamEvil


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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


© Copyright 1999 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
Dragoness
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since 1999-08-07
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1 posted 1999-10-09 05:15 AM


The phoenix rose from the ashes.So shall you,in your own time and your own form.And be stronger for it.This Dragon will be at your side ......waiting. Well done dear brother.Excellent verse.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.


RainbowGirl
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2 posted 1999-10-09 05:18 AM


Dream: "You prove my hatred of women is just."

Not so...that's prejudiced but I'm sorry that someone of the same gender can cause such emotions..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
3 posted 1999-10-09 05:21 AM


Eeek again sir, I fear that one day you'll get so bad that my monitor will suffer the brunt and go up in flames!
Palpable feeling of bitterness!

Kelly
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since 1999-07-03
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4 posted 1999-10-09 05:08 PM


I don't know about sweet but it's very good and short.
Balladeer
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5 posted 1999-10-09 05:16 PM


If this is sweet, remind me never to ask you to pass the sugar. Good poem, Dream.
Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
6 posted 1999-10-09 05:20 PM


Such a bitter poem......hope you don't hate me too for belonging to the female race?

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-


[This message has been edited by Systematic Decay (edited 10-09-1999).]

Shar
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since 1999-09-15
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Hesperia, Ca. USA
7 posted 1999-10-09 05:32 PM


Sounds like quite a bit of hurt going on here. Hurt can bring bitterness......so sorry for your pain but you expressed it well.
Shar

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
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8 posted 1999-10-09 05:33 PM


Sister of my heart, pain is life, life is short, I will endure.

RainbowGirl, 'tis not just one occurence with one woman that has embittered me.

Christopher and Revered Elder, I have but sipped from the well of bitterness within me.

Kelly, thank you but compared to what I deleted, this is hearts and flowers.

Sys, absolutely not!

Shar, though I can write any emotion, bitterness and spite flow as well as the Darkness does.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©



[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 10-09-1999).]

RainbowGirl
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9 posted 1999-10-09 05:44 PM


Dream: It isn't people that cause us to be bitter but how we view their actions ..:-))

HUGS...ooops..(are they allowed?..*g*)

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
10 posted 1999-10-09 07:57 PM


If someone causes so much pain, step away. If you continue to allow someone like this in your life, you perpetuate the pain inflicted on you. Your pain and bitterness show in this excellent poem.

Alwye
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In the space between moments
11 posted 1999-10-09 09:48 PM


Deeply painful and bitter my friend..your talent is phenomenal, and you must realize that..I only wish that somehow you'll find more happiness than you seem to have right now.

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller



Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

12 posted 1999-10-10 09:51 PM


I'm glad you have an outlet, cause I wouldn't want to be your internal organs!!! A well wrought, passionate piece dear Dream.
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