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CaiTheJediPoet
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since 1999-10-09
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Houston, TX, USA

0 posted 1999-10-09 01:27 AM


This torments me
how I can't look into your eyes
How frightening
without some kind of surprise
Such fantasy
Do I find hidden under deep veils of sorrow and pain
No don't look back now
My home, my heart, my soul, my hands
all find their place within where you stand
please oh please be that one ideal man
be the one that's intrinsic to my being
be the one from my dreams I'm always seeing
be the pattern that makes me flow
be the rhythm that makes me go
be all that I need and I'll be
I'll be everything you can see
I'll be as far as the plaisn spread
I'll be your wide eyed rabbit with a timid stare
I'll let you run your fingers through my silkspun hair
I'll talk with you until 3 am
I'll make you casserole and break off the broccoli stems
Just do whatever makes you who you are
and be with me
until we see the furst morning star.

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Cai the Jedi Poet

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Dragoness
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since 1999-08-07
Posts 513

1 posted 1999-10-09 04:31 AM


This would flow better if you drop a few of the I'll's

everything you can see
as far as the plains spread
your wide eyed rabbit with a timid stare
run your fingers through my silkspun hair
talk with you until 3 am

Like this one.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.


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