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Denise
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0 posted 10-08-1999 11:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise

I sail serene
On sea of dreams
And drift along
calm tranquil streams;

I soar cloud fluffs
In azure sky
Above peak's crest
Where eagles fly;

In Paradise
I spend much time
There musing long
And penning rhyme;

'Tis truly this
Makes my heart throb;
I'm careful though
-I need my job!!



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Denise
© Copyright 1999 Denise - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 10-08-1999 11:24 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

~*LOL*~ Denise!! You and hoot are gonna get caught at work with ink on your hands!
Just do like I do...hehehe...tell them you're taking notes!

This poem likes me, D!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 10-08-1999 11:29 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Beautiful one Denise....I love the meter and rhyme in it also the subject matter is a bit close to my heart

caroline....I only write on break, unless you count writing in my mind, then I am always guilty of that

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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.
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3 posted 10-09-1999 12:41 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thanks, Caroline and Hoot! (I don't really get a break or lunch at work, so I make my own 'breaks'!)

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4 posted 10-09-1999 07:13 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I loved this one...love the twist at the end.. but it's a lovely, lovely poem!
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5 posted 10-09-1999 08:48 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Denice,
Well done a touch of insight into your life.
Mike
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6 posted 10-09-1999 10:16 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

I float amid the clouds on high,
Carried by your odes sublime,
Beauteous thoughts expressed so well,
Now back to work, quit wasting time.

You do have a special talent Denise.
RobertB
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7 posted 10-09-1999 11:44 AM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

wow Denise...you like to twist the endings too?? Very nice poem.....I liked it much!!!

RB

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
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8 posted 10-09-1999 12:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you PdV, Seymour, Mike and Robert for reading and commenting. ....ahhhhhh Mike, do I have to *whining*! Robert, yes I love twisting endings! (closest I seem to be able to come to wit!)
Thanks again all!!!

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Denise
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LOL, love the twist to the end of a beautiful work!

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller


Denise
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10 posted 10-10-1999 12:14 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thanks, Krista, glad you liked it! It was fun to do!

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Denise
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11 posted 10-13-1999 09:46 AM       View Profile for Genea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Genea

this flowed well and i love the 'surprise' ending.
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Now that I am retired I no longer have to keep a 'cover' sheet handy to cover the evidence. Loved the ending as well.

Ohme
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13 posted 10-13-1999 10:02 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Denise this was a great poem! You had me calm and serene at the beginning. Great job, great ending!
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14 posted 10-14-1999 07:35 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Denise, I love it, from the first word until the last.
Denise
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15 posted 10-14-1999 07:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Genea, Ohme,WhtDove and Munda, I'm glad you liked this! I had fun writing it! Thank you for your lovely comments!

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Denise
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Hehe - Don't they understand that this is more important?
Denise
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17 posted 10-17-1999 03:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I know, what's WRONG with these people!
Thanks for reading and commenting, Nan, it's always appreciated!

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Denise
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Delightful piece Denise!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Denise
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19 posted 10-17-1999 04:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you much, Pepper, I'm glad you liked it!

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Denise
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20 posted 10-17-1999 04:21 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Denise, this poem was beautiful. I loved the twist ending too...i think everyone so far has.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
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21 posted 10-17-1999 04:24 PM       View Profile for jac   Email jac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jac

D, great job. I also post my poetry on this site! You are very talented!

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jac
Denise
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22 posted 10-17-1999 04:25 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thanks, SD, I'm glad you liked it too!
(sorry, all the smiley faces are gone...hehehehehe)!
...ooops...Why thank you jac! I'm glad you liked it too! (you beat me to the post!)
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Denise

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Martie
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23 posted 10-17-1999 09:29 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

There are so many that can relate to this here. I wonder why? Great poem.
Denise
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24 posted 10-17-1999 09:39 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thanks for reading and commenting, Martie!
Yeah, I guess we're all cut from the same cloth!!! I'd rather write poetry than work anyday. Say I wonder if could find a job writing poetry!? Then I wouldn't even care that I worked long hours for little pay, no benefits (yet), no paid holidays, having to work holidays! Oh my, I do think I am going to look for another job soon! There are too many holidays coming up!

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Denise


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