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The Perfect Description of the eyes

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theartuldodger
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0 posted 10-08-1999 01:40 PM       View Profile for theartuldodger   Email theartuldodger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for theartuldodger

. . . I just can't figure one out.

Hey, I'm writing a poem about a woman in my life, and in another poem I saw online the author described his girlfriend as having "eyes that hold midnight." Unfortunately, my girlfriand has these beautiful light blue eyes, so midnight probably wouldn't cut it in the poem I'm writing about her. I need some suggestions on what comparison I could draw to her eyes that fits in the following sentence "eyes that hold ____." I've brainstormed quite a bit on this question, but so far, these were the only things i think of to compare her too:

Eyes that hold the crystal sea
Eyes that hold the reflection of the sun on the crystal sea
Eyes that enshrine the blooming of the desert bluebell

Now you can see why I could really use the help. Thanks all for taking the time to read this. Respond or email me with some suggestions.

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use the last line, because sometimes the ocean appears green to some people...

and good luck.
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