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amber
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since 1999-06-15
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los banos, ca,

0 posted 1999-10-08 02:25 AM


please dont ask me to....

forget everything you said,
all the words that broke my heart,
every warm and painful tear,
that helped me fall apart.

please dont ask me.....

if im still in love with you,
if my world still lives in your eyes,
if everynight i sleep alone,
my heart seems to die.

please dont ask.....

to kiss me just this once,
for the last time,
because i know you know,
i wont be able to say goodbye.

please dont....

tell me that you need me,
that im everything you have,
that it shouldnt be this way,
and its hurting you so bad.

please....

just love me like i deserve,
give me your soul the way you have mine,
make me your world, your universe,
without all the lies this time.

and all you have to say to me,
after all my heartfelt misery,
is "you know that i love you,"
"but please dont ask me to."

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im always the one to say im sorry, but have never once forgave myself......

© Copyright 1999 amber jean white - All Rights Reserved
suthern
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1 posted 1999-10-08 10:04 AM


So very sad... well done, amber!
LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23
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2 posted 1999-10-08 10:14 AM


Amber

I love the way you wrote this poem. Man! This is one neat, well-structured poem. Lady - you really worked on this one, didn't you? I love the way you kept shortening the leads until there were none. This was great!

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
3 posted 1999-10-08 10:47 AM


This was sooo sad....but well written!!
Very good!!

Bridgette

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"It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart."

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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Illinois
4 posted 1999-10-08 10:52 AM


Sad? YES Well done? VERY! I too like the way you did this!
Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
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Honea Path, SC USA
5 posted 1999-10-08 03:20 PM


bravo!

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It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley
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Denise
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6 posted 1999-10-08 03:53 PM


Amber, I enjoyed this very much!

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Denise

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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 1999-10-09 12:45 PM


Nicely written
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