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amber
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0 posted 10-08-1999 02:25 AM       View Profile for amber   Email amber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for amber

please dont ask me to....

forget everything you said,
all the words that broke my heart,
every warm and painful tear,
that helped me fall apart.

please dont ask me.....

if im still in love with you,
if my world still lives in your eyes,
if everynight i sleep alone,
my heart seems to die.

please dont ask.....

to kiss me just this once,
for the last time,
because i know you know,
i wont be able to say goodbye.

please dont....

tell me that you need me,
that im everything you have,
that it shouldnt be this way,
and its hurting you so bad.

please....

just love me like i deserve,
give me your soul the way you have mine,
make me your world, your universe,
without all the lies this time.

and all you have to say to me,
after all my heartfelt misery,
is "you know that i love you,"
"but please dont ask me to."

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im always the one to say im sorry, but have never once forgave myself......
© Copyright 1999 amber jean white - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-08-1999 10:04 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

So very sad... well done, amber!
LngJhnAg
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2 posted 10-08-1999 10:14 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Amber

I love the way you wrote this poem. Man! This is one neat, well-structured poem. Lady - you really worked on this one, didn't you? I love the way you kept shortening the leads until there were none. This was great!
Justbleu
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3 posted 10-08-1999 10:47 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

This was sooo sad....but well written!!
Very good!!

Bridgette

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"It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart."
WhtDove
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4 posted 10-08-1999 10:52 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Sad? YES Well done? VERY! I too like the way you did this!
Tara Simms
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5 posted 10-08-1999 03:20 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

bravo!

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It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley
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6 posted 10-08-1999 03:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Amber, I enjoyed this very much!

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Denise
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7 posted 10-09-1999 12:45 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nicely written
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