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Alain DeLaCendres
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since 1999-07-02
Posts 119
Ohio

0 posted 1999-10-08 01:02 AM


*note: Any suggestions on which version is more correct and explanitory?

Examinez mes oeils.
Qu'est-ce que tu sièges?
Rien du tout?
Peut-être mon amour pour toi?

Je doute si tu sièges quoi que ce soit,
si peu que ce soit.
Tu sait quoi...
ce douleur.

Mais je fait le pitre...
j'amoureux de toi toujours.

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Examinez mes yeux.
Que voyez-vous?
Rien du tout?
Puet-être mon amour pour vous?

Je doute que vous voyez n'importante quoi du tout,
ne rein du tout.
Vous savez ce qui...
ce a blessante.

Mais je joue l'imbécile...
je vous aime toujours.

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and the English version..
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Examine my eyes.
What do you see?
Nothing at all?
Maybe my love for you?

I doubt whether you see anything at all,
anything at all.
Tou know what...
that hurts.

But I play the fool...
I still love you.

11:13pm / 10-5-99


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Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie.

[This message has been edited by Alain DeLaCendres (edited 10-08-1999).]

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Dragoness
Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513

1 posted 1999-10-08 07:27 AM


Nice free verse.Unfortunatly my French is terrible,can offer any help there.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.


hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 1999-10-09 12:52 PM


Beautiful, what more can I say.
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