navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #3 » Free Passage (Challange from RobertB)
Open Poetry #3
Post A Reply Post New Topic Free Passage (Challange from RobertB) Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648


0 posted 1999-10-07 08:48 PM


Found in the mind's
A universe
A treasure trove
With gems diverse!

A wondrous land
Of star-dust dreams
So magical
Its bright moon beams!

Adventures grand
Await the heart
The passage - free
So journey start!

Explore new worlds
Traipse hill and glen
Perhaps a jaunt
To 'way-back-when'!

Upon great seas
The soul can sail
Chart any course
No plan can fail!

Be rich or poor
life's circumstance
Amongst the stars
there - all can dance!



------------------
Denise

© Copyright 1999 Denise - All Rights Reserved
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

1 posted 1999-10-07 09:14 PM


What a vision! Love the use of those ! marks.
Excellent.

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 1999-10-07 09:30 PM


A vision indeed!! Well done as always Denise..

------------------
How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



RobertB
Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104
Champaign, IL
3 posted 1999-10-07 10:39 PM


Alright Denise!!!!!!!!!!!! Yippeeee

RB

------------------
if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

4 posted 1999-10-07 11:05 PM


Severn, Isis and Robert, thank you so much!

------------------
Denise

Julie
Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739
Houston, TX
5 posted 1999-10-07 11:37 PM


Just Beautiful Denise.

------------------
Julie
-------------------------
Thou who has given so much to me,
give one thing more: a grateful heart.
>George Herbert




Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
6 posted 1999-10-08 08:53 AM


Denice,
Well done a keeper.

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

7 posted 1999-10-08 04:10 PM


Julie and Seymour, thank you for reading and commenting!

------------------
Denise

H. Arlequin
Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210

8 posted 1999-11-03 02:58 AM


smooooooooooches Denise,

kutgw!!

HA

Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

9 posted 1999-11-03 11:47 AM


Absolutely Lovely!!

------------------
Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

10 posted 1999-11-03 07:48 PM


Thank you, H.A. and Watcher! As always, I appreciate your reading and commenting!

------------------
Denise


hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
11 posted 1999-11-03 11:11 PM


I love it
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

12 posted 1999-11-03 11:16 PM


Thanks Hoot!

------------------
Denise


Craig
Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444

13 posted 1999-11-04 06:47 PM


Well written ( as ever ).

Short lines are the hardest to write and you have done it here so well.

Craig

------------------
Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.


WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
14 posted 1999-11-04 07:30 PM


Exceeded the challenge. Great one D!
Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
15 posted 1999-11-04 07:33 PM


Denise, I agree with Chris....short lines are very difficult, and this was wonderful.

------------------
Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

16 posted 1999-11-04 09:19 PM


Thank you, Craig, WhtDove and Sys for your kind comments! Wow, ya mean I did something that is difficult!!! *feeling so smart* hehehehehehe...seriously, it didn't seem difficult...but then again, what do I know!

Thanks again!

------------------
Denise


passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
17 posted 2004-04-25 09:23 PM


yes

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #3 » Free Passage (Challange from RobertB)

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary