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The better man

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The Jackal
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0 posted 10-07-1999 12:37 PM       View Profile for The Jackal   Email The Jackal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for The Jackal

when there's no one here to save you
glance through the cracks at me
watch me drop the bricks
called guilt
on the hurt
blame is free
as your little wound
heals
save the one
who deals the pain
it always felt so sane
a little sensual
but a lot less than you planned
perhaps that will keep you
safe and understand
that today
you live
the better man



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1 posted 10-07-1999 04:27 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Well, I'm lost. What is your meaning here? I start out looking at it one way, and then it does a U turn.
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2 posted 10-07-1999 04:30 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

not too shabby

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


Elizabeth
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3 posted 10-25-1999 08:56 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Would you mind elaborating on this piece a little, so I can appropriately respond to it?

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

"Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..."

Watcher666
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4 posted 10-26-1999 09:02 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

If only we all could be absolved of guilt that easily.Nicely done.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Julie
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5 posted 10-26-1999 12:45 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Well for those that didn't catch what you were saying...to me this talks of forgiveness to someone that hurt you. That once the pain of their indescretion begins to subside go ahead and be a friend to them when they need you....right Jackal?

I enjoyed this...
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