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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
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0 posted 1999-10-07 12:37 PM


when there's no one here to save you
glance through the cracks at me
watch me drop the bricks
called guilt
on the hurt
blame is free
as your little wound
heals
save the one
who deals the pain
it always felt so sane
a little sensual
but a lot less than you planned
perhaps that will keep you
safe and understand
that today
you live
the better man



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Sunshine
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1 posted 1999-10-07 04:27 PM


Well, I'm lost. What is your meaning here? I start out looking at it one way, and then it does a U turn.
Saxoness
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2 posted 1999-10-07 04:30 PM


not too shabby

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot



Elizabeth
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3 posted 1999-10-25 08:56 PM


Would you mind elaborating on this piece a little, so I can appropriately respond to it?

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

"Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..."


Watcher666
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4 posted 1999-10-26 09:02 AM


If only we all could be absolved of guilt that easily.Nicely done.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Julie
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5 posted 1999-10-26 12:45 PM


Well for those that didn't catch what you were saying...to me this talks of forgiveness to someone that hurt you. That once the pain of their indescretion begins to subside go ahead and be a friend to them when they need you....right Jackal?

I enjoyed this...

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