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Soleil
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0 posted 1999-10-06 10:07 PM


In some beatific elsewhere
With listless and lost heart
I search for the never born.
The cries of scarecrows
And swallows
Is torn by the breeze.
And while ospreys fly
Aimlessly
I set up my watchtower
To conquer time’s
Ancient dynasty.
He feigns surrender,
And ignores my presence.
I can’t release the light.
It scrapes against my face.
And influences me
With its stillness.
For the past has been breathed
Relying on what cannot be
And what is now remembered.
I will, I will.
I was betrayed.


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caroline
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1 posted 1999-10-08 09:02 PM


I missed this the first time around, and I think it deserves a ride back to the top

"I can't release the light
it scrapes across my face"...

Wonderful, Soliel

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats


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2 posted 1999-10-08 09:51 PM


The phrasing and images are very well done. I would really like to know more about the meaning behind them, if possible. I'm dense sometimes.
Soleil
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3 posted 1999-10-09 08:01 PM


Ah...pretty painful topic. It'll probably come to you. It is there in a fairly straightforward manner.
Kelly
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4 posted 1999-10-09 08:08 PM


Very interesting. I like it.
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