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Betrayal

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Soleil
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0 posted 10-06-1999 10:07 PM       View Profile for Soleil   Email Soleil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Soleil

In some beatific elsewhere
With listless and lost heart
I search for the never born.
The cries of scarecrows
And swallows
Is torn by the breeze.
And while ospreys fly
Aimlessly
I set up my watchtower
To conquer timeís
Ancient dynasty.
He feigns surrender,
And ignores my presence.
I canít release the light.
It scrapes against my face.
And influences me
With its stillness.
For the past has been breathed
Relying on what cannot be
And what is now remembered.
I will, I will.
I was betrayed.

© Copyright 1999 Soleil - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 10-08-1999 09:02 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

I missed this the first time around, and I think it deserves a ride back to the top

"I can't release the light
it scrapes across my face"...

Wonderful, Soliel

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

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2 posted 10-08-1999 09:51 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

The phrasing and images are very well done. I would really like to know more about the meaning behind them, if possible. I'm dense sometimes.
Soleil
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3 posted 10-09-1999 08:01 PM       View Profile for Soleil   Email Soleil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Soleil

Ah...pretty painful topic. It'll probably come to you. It is there in a fairly straightforward manner.
Kelly
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4 posted 10-09-1999 08:08 PM       View Profile for Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kelly

Very interesting. I like it.
 
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