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The beginning

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 10-05-1999 09:55 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

The beginning

Raised from heavens reap
Raptures deep.
A miracle
Male.
Drawn
Of
Dust and stone
Naked
Frail.
Skin and bone
Born
Naive
And
Then
There
was
EVE.
© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 10-05-1999 10:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Says it all!

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Denise
RobertB
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2 posted 10-05-1999 10:21 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

really nice....and just think....I had a guy tell me in another forum, which I won't mention, that he thought one word lines were stupid and pointless. I think a one word line can say it all as you have demonstrated.

RB

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if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.
Seymour Tabin
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Denise & RobertB,
Glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for the comments
Balladeer
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4 posted 10-05-1999 11:22 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Born naive and then there was Eve.....boy, does that say all that needs to be said! Good going, Sy.
A Romantic Heart
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5 posted 10-06-1999 06:39 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

I really enjoyed this piece of art!
Tara Simms
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6 posted 10-06-1999 07:01 AM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

I love the way the words tumble after each other, moving me through to the end of the poem.

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It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley
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Sunshine
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7 posted 10-06-1999 09:38 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Understatedly well done.
hoot_owl_rn
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Well done...applauds!!
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9 posted 10-06-1999 09:45 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

These hands are clapping, too! Well done, Seymour!
Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 10-06-1999 01:11 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

To all my wonderful friends above I clap my hands for thee.
Pepper
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more applause!! "And Then There was EVE"......love it Sy

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Pufalove
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"Ditto" to all the above. Oh, and that is why he made us second, he wanted to make sure he had it right!

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O all ye powers that he implanted, Arise, keep silence no more; put forth the strength that he hath granted, your noblest work is to adore.

sandgrain
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13 posted 10-06-1999 07:51 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

Every great artist makes a rough draft first...then there was Eve. The verse is so flowing. I really like it.
Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 10-06-1999 10:29 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Pepper, Puf & sand,
Clever wits all three. thank you all.
 
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