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Blue
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0 posted 10-05-1999 09:14 PM       View Profile for Blue   Email Blue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blue


the sky bleeds
blood like rain seeping from the clouds
tears like rain falling from my eyes
heart split open
exposed to this violent world
the world that weeps with me
the life I bleed into
the sky opens up
and unleashes my pain
red pain
black hurt
hot tears
sharp claws
tear the sky
open wide
expose the truth
mourn my loss
no more angles
light to dark
love to hate
hate that swallows
insanity that consumes
crying into the sky
what happened
to my beautiful sky
© Copyright 1999 Blue - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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1 posted 10-05-1999 09:46 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

My God, verbal deep impact. You've left little ol' me speechless, great job!!

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What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Isis
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2 posted 10-05-1999 09:46 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

P.S. I forgot to say Welcome to Passions!

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What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Isis
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3 posted 10-05-1999 09:53 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

God, you've left me speechless on this one.
You depict those emotions so well.
And welcome to Passions..

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What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls a


4 posted 10-06-1999 01:10 AM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Wow, I also thought this was great.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
Blue
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5 posted 10-06-1999 05:58 AM       View Profile for Blue   Email Blue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blue

Thank you...and my friends just said it was disturbing. :-)
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 10-06-1999 09:31 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Whew...what imagery
Sunshine
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7 posted 10-06-1999 02:19 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Blue, your friends do not have [yet] the poetic soul to encompass such a piece. Thank you for joining us, and sharing.
LngJhnAg
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since 07-23-99
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8 posted 10-06-1999 02:22 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Hey, Blue! This was definitely "Deep Impact". great job of using short jabs from the right and left to drive home a winner. I really think this is great.
Pepper
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9 posted 10-06-1999 02:29 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

great visual....intense poem.....really enjoyed the read.....Welcome Blue

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Blue
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10 posted 10-06-1999 05:14 PM       View Profile for Blue   Email Blue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blue

Thanks again everybody!
Justbleu
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11 posted 10-29-2005 01:27 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Love the intensity!!!!!

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink

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