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Winter-izing

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Balladeer
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0 posted 10-05-1999 04:13 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Winter's waves of whiteness settle on the snowy scene,
Soft flakes slowly falling on this setting so serene.
Pasture grass is covered. Emerald green turns snowy white,
Cattle grazing shake their heads on this cold wintery night.

I see the rooftop covered now. The chimney stands alone.
The shingles shining silvery in melancholy tone.
Green forest ferns fill up with snow as they coagulate.
Tree branches bend - don't break, though - as they hold the extra weight.

I look outside to see the tourists walking down the street,
Bermuda shorts and halter tops to beat the morning heat.
I don my shorts and t-shirt plus my wide-brimmed hat and then
I give the glass globe one more shake to watch the snow again.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-05-1999 04:18 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

I rest inside my humble home,
As the snow grows deeper with each flake.
It had all been quiet, me there alone,
Until, my God! Another Earthquake!!!!



[This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 10-05-1999).]
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2 posted 10-05-1999 04:19 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

*big smiles* love this, great picture
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3 posted 10-05-1999 04:22 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I don't think I'd ever quite looked on those globes as beautiful before. *G* Maybe it's the lack of "You Light Up My Life" or a tinny version of "Winter Wonderland" that makes it so... tasteful. LOL. Great job, 'Deer one... go enjoy your sand and tan tourists! *G*
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4 posted 10-05-1999 04:29 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

I was shivering........then sweating....so this was either an excellent poem, or I'm having hot flashes. lol

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


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5 posted 10-05-1999 09:12 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Now you know, I have seen this setting time and time again here in the North but, there aren't many who see it the way you do, my deer. Poor thing, you need a trip up here in the wintertime. It can be breath taking. (You spoiled thing..LOL)
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6 posted 10-05-1999 09:44 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
I give you a hole in one on this poem. Nice job
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7 posted 10-05-1999 09:56 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent, as usual! You paint such a romantic picture of winter and then surprise us with the ending! I've enjoyed(?) winters all my life. I have a love/hate relationship with this time of year! I'll post one of my views for you! It's called Slip 'n' Slide !


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Denise
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8 posted 10-05-1999 10:02 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Balladeer, I honestly found this poem to be very charming.. I loved the end.. I am gonna print this for my special file.

Make me smile again huh? Will ya, will ya? Please!!!
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I loved the beautiful imagery in the beginning of the poem , and the surprise ending was delightful......Great piece Sir......

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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Well Balladeer, you may get to hold this picture of magic in your hands and to be able to shake it but I get to see it for real as the snow falls so I watch from my windows, fire casting shadows, paw prints sinking as they explore the snow kingdom..:-)

Thanks for the visual

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

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11 posted 10-05-1999 10:31 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

LOL ... my first thought when I read this was "winterizing...? In Florida...?!?" You mean, like, getting out the Christmas music..? Lord knows the only way you know its winter in Florida is by when the stores put out the darn decorations ...

This was cute, though, and when I read the first stanza, I didn't expect the Floridian ending ... well done.

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


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Thank you all for the warm comments.

I'll keep trying, Lucie.

Denise....Slip & Slide? You wrote a poem about my love life?
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I loved this one. I especially liked the line: The shingles shining silvery in melancholy tone.

And the ending was a nice suprise

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-Billy Corgan-
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ahh yes sweet Balladeer..you have again succeeded in surprising me with the ending...LOL. There is one thing about the winter scene that I found missing (IMHO the most breath taking sight in winter). When there has been a warm period and it rains then freezes. The ice hangs from everything, coating it in a layer of glass. The sun sparkles as it softly caresses every branch and leaf. (So I can't find anything truely wrong with any of your work...sue me...LOL)
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I'm with Nocht up there. I was thinking that too, in Florida? I had this beautiful vision in my head of that first snowfall of the year. The ground being covered by the beauty of white pureness, then it all melted in the next line. What a surprise that was! Very well done Balladeer! I love this one!
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Thank you, SD. I like it, too.

Marilyn, my law firm of Dewey, Screwum & Howe will contact you in the morning! (thanks for the kind words)
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Thank you, SD. I like it, too.

Marilyn, my law firm of Dewey, Screwum & Howe will contact you in the morning! (thanks for the kind words)
Lucie
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18 posted 10-05-1999 11:37 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

I just love when you repeat yourself like that...like that...like that...like that

hahahhahahaha
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19 posted 10-06-1999 02:16 AM       View Profile for Pufalove   Email Pufalove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pufalove

As usual, you've succeeded in taking my breath away. Beautifully done! Amen to all the above,( and your replys even got a needed laugh outta Lucie...haha).
See how ya are.



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O all ye powers that he implanted, Arise, keep silence no more; put forth the strength that he hath granted, your noblest work is to adore.

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well done balladeer, that last line was top notch, bravo, bravo;
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21 posted 10-06-1999 07:16 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Loved this Balladeer...well done, great unexpected ending.......
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Went to post a reply yesterday, but the server went kaplu-ey. Guess what I was going to post was not server-compatible. So, I'll just ditto, ditto all of the above. I was in Florida last October, reminded me of CA, so, I was glad to come back to Kansas. Oops. Rebel me!
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Wonderfully done Balladeer, that last stanza threw me...I like this!!
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Thank you all....very much.

Keep smiling, Lucie.
 
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