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A Portrait

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Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls a


0 posted 10-05-1999 03:29 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Systematic Decay

A portrait of hate
Hangs in her gut
It eats her up inside
Like the worst kind of acid

A portrait of shame
Hangs on her tongue
It silences the words
That would remain unspoken anyway

A portrait of love
Hangs in her heart
A crooked picture
On a rusty nail

Portraits of woe
Hang on her fingers
Forbidding them to write
A happy thought

A portrait of regret
Hangs in her mind
She didn't have to do it
She's so stupid



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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
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JennyLee
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Northwestern, NJ.


1 posted 10-05-1999 03:40 PM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

I can really relate to this as I have a
potrait all my own.
As always great work!!

Jenny
LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion


2 posted 10-05-1999 04:36 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

This was really great - obviously she was thinking of Toerag or Balladeer - lol. Seriously, though, I liked your similes. They came together really well in the last verse.
Balladeer
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3 posted 10-05-1999 09:10 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is the kind of writing I call brilliant
Isis
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4 posted 10-05-1999 09:23 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

So much expression, well done!

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What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls a


5 posted 10-05-1999 09:55 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Thanks everyone for the compliments

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
Pepper
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6 posted 10-05-1999 10:17 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

exceptional work SD......

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 10-06-1999 09:13 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very thought provoking
 
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