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Shadowed Surfaces

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Severn
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0 posted 10-05-1999 02:47 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

I've captured words before
re-birthed the life of them
transfigured the shapes of image
crafted for all mood
and now:
No metaphor exists
compare you I cannot
lacking in all power
this tongue of mine
no creation strong enough
to etch the form of you
I need new language
a lexicon not yet born
words only of the soul-speak
weak sounds not needed
mute letters denied
those constructs of understanding
useless in the frozen
stretches of my mind
The world's alphabets so used
lacking ever in depiction
Deserver of such freshness
such invention:
from the heart of me
that place alone where
you exist
I can offer only these,
mere shadowed surfaces
of dearest expression
my failure to create
the burning light
I love in you

5.9.99 KM
© Copyright 1999 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


1 posted 10-05-1999 02:56 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Ah my dear, but once again you are wrong.
There is a comparison, and a single word to sum me up.


You.


I marvel at the visual purity of the words you have chosen here K. Each line seems to bear the weight of a thousand.
<--- for you
Isis
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2 posted 10-05-1999 03:10 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Beautiful sentiments between you both, I am jealous..:..

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What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)

Severn
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3 posted 10-05-1999 03:18 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

But Chris - how can you compare two things the same? The weight of a million (I win...), yes, a weight indeed.

Isis, thanks! - but at least you don't have to miss him!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 10-05-1999 08:27 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wonderful job with this one Severn
and Chris...great reply!

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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 10-05-1999 10:37 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
Words are but one tool in your box of tools.
Enjoyed the read.
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


6 posted 10-07-1999 05:13 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh my...
caroline
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7 posted 10-07-1999 09:17 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Severn, you are an extraordinary poet. I love your style, and you always say so much so well

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats
Denise
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8 posted 10-07-1999 09:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Soleil, another masterpiece!

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Denise
Severn
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9 posted 10-07-1999 09:23 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn



Ruth - he is always great with words. Thanks.
Seymour - but words are the best tools of all. Thankyou!
Sunshine - oh my indeed!
Caroline - your praise is wonderfully encouraging.
Dsnyder - AAAKKKK - what is it with my name!!!!!
Thankyou - I think, denise!!!



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