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Shadowed Surfaces |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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I've captured words before re-birthed the life of them transfigured the shapes of image crafted for all mood and now: No metaphor exists compare you I cannot lacking in all power this tongue of mine no creation strong enough to etch the form of you I need new language a lexicon not yet born words only of the soul-speak weak sounds not needed mute letters denied those constructs of understanding useless in the frozen stretches of my mind The world's alphabets so used lacking ever in depiction Deserver of such freshness such invention: from the heart of me that place alone where you exist I can offer only these, mere shadowed surfaces of dearest expression my failure to create the burning light I love in you 5.9.99 KM |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ah my dear, but once again you are wrong. There is a comparison, and a single word to sum me up. You. I marvel at the visual purity of the words you have chosen here K. Each line seems to bear the weight of a thousand.  <--- for you |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautiful sentiments between you both, I am jealous..:.. ------------------ What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
But Chris - how can you compare two things the same? The weight of a million (I win...), yes, a weight indeed.Isis, thanks! - but at least you don't have to miss him!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful job with this one Severn and Chris...great reply! ------------------ Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Words are but one tool in your box of tools. Enjoyed the read. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh my... |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Severn, you are an extraordinary poet. I love your style, and you always say so much so well ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Soleil, another masterpiece! ------------------ Denise |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ruth - he is always great with words. Thanks. Seymour - but words are the best tools of all. Thankyou! Sunshine - oh my indeed! Caroline - your praise is wonderfully encouraging. Dsnyder - AAAKKKK - what is it with my name!!!!! Thankyou - I think, denise!!! [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 10-07-1999).] |
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