»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #3
»
Love's Mist
| Open Poetry #3 |
|
Love's Mist |
|
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
|
(This is just something I played around with on break at work last night) Love’s Mist I dream of you on the deck of a ship soft haze enveloping you as night sets in I am jealous of the mist I long to wrap myself around you like a comfortable robe swaddling you in my body Let me sing to you the oceans lullaby hear my voice in its rhythm see my face in the waves feel my kisses in the spray and crash upon my shores Today, you sail the sea ~tomorrow, sail to me ------------------ Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore. |
||
| © Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved | |||
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Very nice and dreamy, Hoot! |
||
|
Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well I guess love is the theme of the morning and yet, all I can do is sit here twiddling my thumbs...first severn, now you...I may as well just go back to bed. Seriously, a touching poem...makes me miss Femme all the more. ------------------ Michael Anderson The coldest lies are often told in silence. |
||
|
Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
For just playing around with something during a work break you did a damn fine job with this one...and if this is just playing, I would definately love to see something taking serious effort.  This evokes the sea's sensuality with vivid use of imagery. All I can hear in my head is Sugarloaf's "Green-Eyed Lady". Alicat |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Suthern....thanks Michael...I'm sorry, I know you miss her Alicat....thank you, what a nice comment ------------------ Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore. |
||
|
Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Beautiful, Ruth! I especially love the last two lines. Heavenly. ------------------ It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Played around with on break? Geeze, what would you come up with if you spent some time on it?! This is absolutely wonderfully romantic!! ------------------ Denise |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sorry, don't know what happened here! ------------------ Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 10-04-1999).] |
||
|
caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
hoot...keep playing around on breaks!  I agree with the above comments, especially Ali's about the song "GreenEyed Lady" (I can hear it too!)...and yes, the last two lines are perfect! ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you all for your kind replies |
||
|
Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Loved this Hoot.You have a romantic heart. ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
||
|
johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Ruth, You write beautifully of the ocean. Very romantic, too. Take care. Tyson |
||
|
Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
More breaks for you Hoot and we'll all benefit  ------------------ What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Dragoness...thank you and yes I do Isis...smiling, shall I suggest that at work Tyson...well, for some reason, my mind drifts to the ocean lately, maybe you can tell me why |
||
|
WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I can tell ya why it drifts to the ocean! LOL...Wonderful Hoot! Jealous? I am, all this in a break, playing around! Hmmn...J/K |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Laughs, you know what I mean Whtdove...and yes, you do know why my mind drifts to the ocean |
||
|
Soleil Member
since 1999-06-12
Posts 113 |
Very nice.(sounds a bit british to me for some reason) |
||
|
Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Clever usage of words here ruth...you of course know that the underlying emotions are mine as well! |
||
|
ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Hoot, very touching and well expressed... Wish invitations like this would show themselves when we want them most lol Like this very much, good job. |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Soleil....thank you Chris.....yes we do seem to be going through a lot of the same emotions right now, wonder why Thunder....thank you very much |
||
|
Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Hoot, Can you teach me how to play around?!? This was excellent! ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
||
|
Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
It's beautiful!!!! I'd like to print a copy of it if you don't mind. [This message has been edited by Kelly (edited 10-10-1999).] |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Saxoness.....thanks, inspiration has everything to do with it Kelly, thank you and yes you may |
||
|
Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Wow ! and this you call playing around ? Wish I could play like that ! Good job, well written and very romantic. Thanks ! |
||
|
Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh Ruth - drifting drifting drifting...all the way to California, girl! |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Munda....thank you Severn...I know you are girl, hopefully soon I on the other hand am going to drift there Nov 4th |
||
|
rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
very beautiful..your descriptive words paint a vivid picture of longing. I especially love the last two lines. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||