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Love's Mist

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hoot_owl_rn
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(This is just something I played around with on break at work last night)

Love’s Mist

I dream of you
on the deck of a ship
soft haze enveloping you
as night sets in

I am jealous of the mist
I long to wrap myself around you
like a comfortable robe
swaddling you in my body

Let me sing to you the oceans lullaby
hear my voice in its rhythm
see my face in the waves
feel my kisses in the spray
and crash upon my shores

Today, you sail the sea
~tomorrow, sail to me



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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-04-1999 09:14 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Very nice and dreamy, Hoot!
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2 posted 10-04-1999 09:18 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Well I guess love is the theme of the morning and yet, all I can do is sit here twiddling my thumbs...first severn, now you...I may as well just go back to bed.

Seriously, a touching poem...makes me miss Femme all the more.


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For just playing around with something during a work break you did a damn fine job with this one...and if this is just playing, I would definately love to see something taking serious effort.

This evokes the sea's sensuality with vivid use of imagery. All I can hear in my head is Sugarloaf's "Green-Eyed Lady".

Alicat
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Suthern....thanks

Michael...I'm sorry, I know you miss her

Alicat....thank you, what a nice comment

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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.
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Beautiful, Ruth! I especially love the last two lines. Heavenly.

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6 posted 10-04-1999 10:23 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Played around with on break? Geeze, what would you come up with if you spent some time on it?! This is absolutely wonderfully romantic!!

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Sorry, don't know what happened here!
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Denise

[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 10-04-1999).]
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hoot...keep playing around on breaks!
I agree with the above comments, especially Ali's about the song "GreenEyed Lady" (I can hear it too!)...and yes, the last two lines are perfect!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats
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Thank you all for your kind replies
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Loved this Hoot.You have a romantic heart.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

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Ruth,
You write beautifully of the ocean. Very romantic, too. Take care.
Tyson
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More breaks for you Hoot and we'll all benefit

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What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us.
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Dragoness...thank you and yes I do

Isis...smiling, shall I suggest that at work

Tyson...well, for some reason, my mind drifts to the ocean lately, maybe you can tell me why
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I can tell ya why it drifts to the ocean! LOL...Wonderful Hoot! Jealous? I am, all this in a break, playing around! Hmmn...J/K
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Laughs, you know what I mean Whtdove...and yes, you do know why my mind drifts to the ocean
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Very nice.(sounds a bit british to me for some reason)
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Clever usage of words here ruth...you of course know that the underlying emotions are mine as well!
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Hoot, very touching and well expressed... Wish invitations like this would show themselves when we want them most lol Like this very much, good job.
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Soleil....thank you

Chris.....yes we do seem to be going through a lot of the same emotions right now, wonder why

Thunder....thank you very much
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Hoot,

Can you teach me how to play around?!?
This was excellent!

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I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


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It's beautiful!!!! I'd like to print a copy of it if you don't mind.

[This message has been edited by Kelly (edited 10-10-1999).]
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Saxoness.....thanks, inspiration has everything to do with it

Kelly, thank you and yes you may
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Wow ! and this you call playing around ?
Wish I could play like that ! Good job, well written and very romantic. Thanks !
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Oh Ruth - drifting drifting drifting...all the way to California, girl!
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