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Elysium Moon
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0 posted 1999-09-12 10:31 AM



Sitting astride her Stygian mount
wings curled at her side
riding faster through the glen
seeking vengeance for her pride
fiery blood flowing in her veins
the need is on her now
seeking mortal blood
to fulfill her virgin vow
thrusting forward in the seat
crazed with hunger’s desire
no man is safe from vixen’s touch
that ignites her wanton fire

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Beki
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1 posted 1999-09-16 09:21 PM


"thrusting forward in the seat
crazed with hunger’s desire
no man is safe from vixen’s touch
that ignites her wanton fire"
Awesome imagery!


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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
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2 posted 1999-09-26 07:43 PM


Wondrously done! The rhyme at the end adds a final punch to the piece.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
3 posted 1999-09-26 09:08 PM


What else can I say, but that I really liked this!
Elysium Moon
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4 posted 1999-10-02 06:37 PM


I decided to put a beginning to the story. Please see Birth of the Immortal.

Thank you all for you kind words - this is a departure for me.

bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-05-23 02:31 PM


Ah remember this, too. An' ah still love i'.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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