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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 1999-08-18 02:17 PM


A knight in armor road the way
Full of pride that mournful day
It could be in his visor slept
He passed maidens where they wept

Distressed damsels cried out his name
He road on by he was not to blame
They wore such fancy see through clothing
And became the subject of his loathing

He passed beseiged castles at a trot
Those damned vassals deserved their lot
They drank their wine as peasents burned
It was his joy to watch them learn

He wore the blackness of the night
His heart was laced with hopeful light
His soul where anger's talons cut
And rage was all that filled his gut

Helping others not his forte
The reason why he road this way
The sword he wore he killed each foe
Why deemed a knight who wants to know

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 09-13-99).]

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 10-28-1999).]

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Alwye
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1 posted 1999-08-18 04:05 PM


Not a very nice guy, this knight. But wonderfully written tale, none the less!! I liked it!!

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2 posted 1999-08-19 03:01 AM


I agree with Alwye! This is a very great tale indeed! I like, I like!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."



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3 posted 1999-08-19 08:18 AM


Way to rock walt!!

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
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4 posted 1999-10-28 06:22 PM


Now this knight shall trot his way back to the top in respect for all the eyes that happened to miss this on it's first trot through.
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5 posted 1999-10-28 09:20 PM


Walt.......FABULOUS!!!!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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6 posted 1999-10-28 09:21 PM


Wow Walt, this is wonderful. Your meter and rhyme are about as perfect as they can get. I like
Michael
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7 posted 1999-10-29 06:00 AM


Excellent tale, Walt. Told exquisitely. Great use of allusion.


Michael

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8 posted 1999-10-29 08:21 AM


Very well done! I have to agree he wasn't a very nice knight! Great telling of a tale!
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9 posted 1999-10-29 05:02 PM


Well Done, Sir Walt. Well Done.
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10 posted 1999-10-29 05:05 PM


Well done, walt!!
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11 posted 1999-10-30 05:51 AM


Aye Walt I like this one too Everyone can't be a nice guy I guess...but someone still has to tell his story, no? You did that well!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats


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12 posted 1999-10-30 05:57 AM


Applause!
(I like the bad guys!)

wayoutwalt
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13 posted 1999-10-30 05:59 AM


thanx guys if any yall ever played magic the gatherin like i did (now its pokemon cause i got a kid) look at the black knight card was muh inspiration yuh he gots protection from white as his power yuh thanky yuh all
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