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Crimson Memory

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Lucie
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0 posted 10-03-1999 12:07 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lucie

A gentle tug of your memory
I see your eyes that stare at me.
You try to pinpoint where we met,
but you have not remembered yet.

It was a time not too long past
the memory comes, but fades too fast.
And so you shrug and shake my hand
my expression you donít understand.

For my memory of you did not fade
I remember well the games you played.
With the emotions of a younger me
embedded in my memory.

I was young and so naive
so quick to trust and to believe.
That you the worldly man you are
would hold my hand and take me far.

But I was just another notch,
upon your sheets a crimson blotch.
Itís the only thing I left behind.
No compassion in your eyes I find.

The elfin blonde who holds your arm
does not realize the potential harm.
That you will have upon her heart
another notch, then you will part.

A knowing smile lights my eyes
for I have just now realized.
That you are not a man at all
just a little boy, extremely small.

For real men it is understood
they need not collect maidenhood.
A real man would not take pleasure
in stealing a young girls only treasure.


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Never forget what is worth remembering or remember what is best forgotten.
© Copyright 1999 Lucille Dobbins - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 10-03-1999 12:10 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Lucie I'll say it again....you ROCK, girlfriend! No one can tell 'em like you do!

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Michael
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2 posted 10-03-1999 12:12 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Lucie, this is SO Powerful, and unfortuanately so true in the world today.
My heart goes out to you reading this.
So sad and poignant as well. Great work.

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Michael Anderson

I could not love except where Death
Was mingling his with Beauty's breath -
Or Hymen, Time, and Destiny
Were stalking between her and me.
EAP



Alwye
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3 posted 10-03-1999 12:16 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Phenomenal....this is extremely powerful, and way too true. I'm breathless..

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller


Pufalove
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4 posted 10-03-1999 05:43 AM       View Profile for Pufalove   Email Pufalove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pufalove

What happens when we run out of comments?
This is a really power-packed one! Isn't it great that there are "good guys" out there.
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 10-03-1999 09:24 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

EXCELLENT!!!! BRAVO!! Lucie, this is well written and speaks alot of todays society. I'm glad you have the strenght and the courage to write like this, you can make an impact on the world with your words. You go girl!!

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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.
Pepper
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6 posted 10-03-1999 10:59 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

I echo all the above........extremely well written Lucie.............

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Lucie
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7 posted 10-03-1999 12:14 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

I thank you all so much for your comments and replies.

You honor me with your praises, stoooop it..your makin me cry!

Beki
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8 posted 10-03-1999 04:23 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Well said Lucie...bravo!

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society
Denise
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9 posted 10-03-1999 04:36 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent! Every mother should give this to every daugther!

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Denise
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10 posted 10-04-1999 09:23 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This needs another go round!

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Denise
Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 10-04-1999 09:48 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Lucie,
Thou shall not steal, that's one of the comandments. Good job.
Poet deVine
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12 posted 10-05-1999 12:33 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Do you know how incredibly good this is!!! You put this man in his place! Small man! And I don't mean in height! Excellent poem, Lucie.
Lucie
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13 posted 10-05-1999 12:40 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Thank you all for your replies..

Dsnyder for the second go around..

and deVine... glad you like it!

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Not all poems I write are about me personally, yet they do come from MY soul.
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