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Wishing Upon The Moon (first ever attempt at freeverse)

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Alwye
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In the space between moments


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Whispering echoes gently dance about
Warmth filled spirits enclose
Your fragrance heavy within the air
The image softly shimmers
Just beyond a finger's reach
Emotion sweet, yet so bitter stained
Raining within my soul
Promises delivered by a lying moon
You are here, yet so far away
Threads of my heart reach out
Flooding you with my eternal vision
Starlight dimmed in quiet desperation
Dreams reflect my sparkled hope
Of when our touch may be real
When the liquid firelight flickers
Within the most tender gaze
And you caress my weary face
And when our whispers touch
The moon will speak the truth
And our love will once again be.

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller


© Copyright 1999 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
Nicole
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1 posted 10-03-1999 12:02 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

First ever?..Alwye, this is very poignant and well done. I especially liked the line 'Emotion sweet, yet so bitter stained'! I look forward to more from you!
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Very lovely, Krista. I enjoyed this!

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Denise
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3 posted 10-03-1999 12:08 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

"Promises delivered by a lying moon..."
stunning, Alwye! You keep writing free verse, I'll keep reading!

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Alwye
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Ah Caroline, You pinpointed the line that was part of the inspiration for this piece (along with a lovesick heart). I recently heard a song called "Lying to the moon" and liked the phrase.

And yes, Satiate, my first ever attempt that didn't end after about 3 lines..

Thank you all very much for your kindness.

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller




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wonderful Alwye......this piece I enjoyed much......

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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Well done Krista.....my only suggestion....don't let this be your last free verse, the format does you justice or shall I say you do it justice

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Thanks!!

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller


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8 posted 10-03-1999 06:41 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Alwye, Great job for a first attempt!! Hope to see many more over the coming months.

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I really like this. Excelant....
Alwye
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Thank you.

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller


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11 posted 10-04-1999 01:54 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

And a very fine attempt, Alwye! Nicely done.
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Great poem, Alwye
I love free verse poems........structured poems are rgeat when you want something challenging, but free verse lets you pour out your feelings however you want.

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Alwye
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Thank you. Yes, I've found that I can truly express what I want to say without boundries when I write freeverse. I enjoy it.

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*Krista Knutson*

Wise is he who faces the frailty of man with the strength of an understanding heart. -- Daniel L. Miller


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I've always loved free verse
 
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