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caroline
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0 posted 10-02-1999 10:18 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for caroline

Remember Me…

I see you in your paradise of wind
crashing waves and sunlight move
together to form flowing crystal rain
splashing onto shore
I conjure up your image, see you living
your dreams and knowing you never
think of me now…
though you have lived my life for me
An error of my heart
which I must account for to the many
that I hurt in your name
I live with the crippled trust you
left to me, a scar transferred to
all I touched afterward
But you…bathed in the ocean breezes,
castled in the sands of islands…
You live without memory of my love
Blind to my face behind closed eyes
Any reminder of me washed away in
the tides of your Eden
I send these words on a voyage
into the gulf…a message in a bottle
to float into your pirate mind
and recall me from the guilty
passages of your history
A fleeting sight of the
ship of illusion that you
captained so skillfully…
and abandoned so easily
to sink to the depths of a
watery hell
I sail on…grace and honor
reviving my masts
Fresh currents like smooth
glass lead me to new seas of
glory and there are no thieves
to steal the gold from my eyes
Remember me…

caroline 1999
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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
© Copyright 1999 Caroline - All Rights Reserved
Nicole
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1 posted 10-03-1999 12:07 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

This is excellent...I like the strength portrayed at the end of the poem. Well done.
Julie
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since 08-20-99
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2 posted 10-03-1999 12:24 AM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Can't expect anything less than GREAT from
you Caroline. Excellent job on imagery and
parallel. How do you do it???

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Julie
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Thou who has given so much to me,
give one thing more: a grateful heart.
>George Herbert



Pepper
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since 08-19-99
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3 posted 10-03-1999 12:40 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

another first rate piece Caroline.....I DO enjoy your work.........

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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4 posted 10-03-1999 09:31 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh my, another wonderful poem full of longing and love, two subjects very near and dear to my heart right now well written, very intense imagery

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Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore.
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 10-03-1999 02:38 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Caroline,
You write so well with such a rich palette.
Enjoyed the read.
Denise
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6 posted 10-03-1999 04:11 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Breathtakingly beautiful, Caroline! This is exquisite!

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Denise
caroline
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7 posted 10-03-1999 07:18 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

*blushing* thanks...I'm glad you enjoyed this one.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Severn
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8 posted 10-04-1999 01:46 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

My Lord, Caroline - this is superb!
'Castled in the sands of islands...' - simply beautiful.
passing shadows
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9 posted 04-17-2004 05:16 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

enjoyed this

wonderful piece
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