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There Were Two

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Sunshine
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There Were Two

Once, there were two,
sharing all of everything,
in the dusk of day.

Now I,
standing alone,
watching a figure face into
nothing,

and I can only watch.

There were not
many words, and he knows not
of what I feel,
or have felt.

Loneliness
and a kiss
warms my heart, dies out, and
turns cold; empty.

Barren as a tree of leaves
in winterís white morning.

Silence is loud when alone,
to linger on fading memories
and fragrances,
of roses and dreams.

Donít come back ~
not now,
as you might want to leave again,
and I would have to suffer
once more.

Would you like it? Change places then,
and breath
the hollow air,
feel the touch
of creeping coldness

hear
the fading
of laughter

smell the sweetness
of old flowers
the now mean
no more.

Then
youíll want
two
to
be
here.

Circa 1969
©KRJ
2 October, 1999


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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 10-04-1999).]
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Pepper
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1 posted 10-02-1999 04:13 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

it's so painful to watch a love leave and be helpless to change it.......a very poigniant work.....Sunshine thanks for sharing

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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2 posted 10-03-1999 08:04 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

We've both been there, haven't we, Pepper? Thanks for reading...
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 10-03-1999 02:31 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sunshine,
I'll have to see what I can do to warm you up. Nice work.
JennyLee
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4 posted 10-03-1999 02:32 PM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

I loved the form in which you wrote this,I enjoyed it alot !!

Jenny
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You have portrayed the sadness loneliness very well.

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Denise
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6 posted 10-04-1999 11:00 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Sy, things have been quite warm ever since - helps when the right one finds you;

Jenny Lee, thank you for the comment on the form. Sometimes I want to post a warning "Read Slow!";

denise, thank you. If you saw the sorrow, then I did a good job.
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