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A Crappy Untitled Sestina. (Challenge from Poet deVine)

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Systematic Decay
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0 posted 10-01-1999 09:57 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Systematic Decay

Ok this is the first sestina iv'e written, I probably did it wrong and it probably sucks but here it is anyway.


I'm lonely in my love
I'm joyous in my hate
I'm drowning in my despair
I can feel through my pain
I can make myself numb
I'm perfect in my apathy

I'm looking for my apathy
I think I lost it in my love
Where's that pill that makes me numb?
I think it was stolen by my hate
I feel too much in my pain
I sink deeper in my despair

I'm giving in to despair
I gave up on my apathy
He's the one who nurses the pain
Regardless, he is the one I love
But eternally, I still hate
The world that won't let me be numb

I pray at night to again be numb
So I cannot feel the despair
I'll always have my hate
But he ate away my apathy
And he swallowed it in his love
He claims to feel my pain

The jagged hurt, the piercing pain
I've lost all hope of being numb
Yet through it all, I still love
And that lets me float upon this sea of despair
Sometimes I miss the apathy
And I owe all this to my hate

Turpentine kisses I bestow on my hate
It helped me through the pain
I'll always covet my apathy
I'll always remeber the beauty of numb
But you have drained my sea of despair
However can I thank you, my love?

I used to be in love with pain
And that thing called hate killed the thing called numb
Good riddance to despair, and farewell, apathy



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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-
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Saxoness
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1 posted 10-01-1999 10:02 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

wow...................did you read my mind?
Beautiful

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I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

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Poet deVine
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2 posted 10-01-1999 10:05 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Looks good to me...now I have to write one I guess! Geez who is this Poet deVine and why is she forcing us to do this? LOL
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 10-01-1999 10:34 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Man, you had to post this didn't you, I've been working on one for 3 days now and still not finished

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
hoot_owl_rn
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Man, you had to post this didn't you, I've been working on one for 3 days now and still not finished

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
Pepper
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5 posted 10-01-1999 11:10 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

WOW,SD,.......this is great!!.......

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