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Wendy
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0 posted 10-01-1999 08:42 PM       View Profile for Wendy   Email Wendy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wendy

Clasping my hands together,
Fingers mortared in the brotherhood
Of canned sardines,
Palms cupped skyward,
They are sturdy like a rudder,
Helpful as hemp.

As I rung each footstep
And watch the others disembark,
I suction myself to the security
Of this hull;
Barnacle solid
And zebra mussel tenacious,
Rising always steady with the watermark,
Seaweed hanging in chains,
Flotsam bobbing
Like the leering jack in the box.

How fetally safe one must feel
To float fluid in the lungs.
Even the careless suicides
Get to map their deadly anniversaries.
© Copyright 1999 Wendy - All Rights Reserved
Justin Thyme
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1 posted 10-01-1999 09:06 PM       View Profile for Justin Thyme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Justin Thyme

Interesting imagery.... I read this several times and need to read it again... you have quite an ability to paint a picture using words and that's one helluva talent, Ms. Wendy.

Hey, care to give some insight into this poem? I'd appreciate hearing your take on it... for instance, what's it mean?

hehehe....

Justin T.
Michael
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2 posted 10-01-1999 09:10 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wonderful imagery Wendy, a quite poignant message I may add

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Michael Anderson

I could not love except where Death
Was mingling his with Beauty's breath -
Or Hymen, Time, and Destiny
Were stalking between her and me.
EAP



caroline
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3 posted 10-01-1999 09:23 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Wendy you certainly have a flair and style that is superb I like this a lot, and the message it imparts is, as stated above, quite poignant.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Nan
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4 posted 10-01-1999 09:39 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

OK Wendy - I do really love this one - The whole poem speaks clearly about who you are - That's obvious to me, knowing you as I do - I just don't get the "careless suicides" part...
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 10-01-1999 11:06 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I like this one, the imagery is grand

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
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Purgatorial Incarceration


6 posted 10-02-1999 02:10 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Feeling sheepish (back of Balladeer!) as well, because I don't understand the "point" of the last two lines either!
 
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