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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 1999-10-01 04:34 PM


Arms entwine
Eyes lock
Music plays
Bodies rock
Clothes loosed
Bare skin
Whispered words
Passions within
Lips touch
Loves high
Hands search
Breathless sigh
Hips meet
Time flies
Two, one
Dreams realized

To Tyson, my love and my inspiration

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 10-01-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
RainbowGirl
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1 posted 1999-10-01 04:38 PM


Hoot: 'You lucky devils' springs to mind..*g*

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


suthern
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2 posted 1999-10-01 04:40 PM


I don't know about a title, Hoot... maybe you should just post a warning to take a deep breath cuz you're gonna lose the ability to breathe for a few moments. *G* Well done!
RainbowGirl
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3 posted 1999-10-01 04:42 PM


Suthern: I see our minds are on the same track...LOL

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 1999-10-01 04:43 PM


Smiles..thanks Rainbow, was thinking the same myself

Suthern...what a compliment, thank you much!!

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.

Lost Dreamer
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5 posted 1999-10-01 04:49 PM


This is great! I don't know if the two of you can get through this month, I know were all gonna be in for some grand poetry as each day draws closer.
Sunshine
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6 posted 1999-10-01 04:49 PM


Warning...Passions Within

works for me!

Good job, Hoot

Balladeer
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7 posted 1999-10-01 05:19 PM


Great, hoot. I like "Encounter in Three Quarter Time" but what do I know?


That Tyson better not be a chicken!

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 1999-10-01 06:49 PM


Dreamer....it's going to be a long month I think

Sunshine...thanks

Balladeer, thanks and a very nice suggestion, really like it

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.

Dark Angel
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9 posted 1999-10-01 06:55 PM


PHEW! Hoot, this is great,I agree with Suthern. definatley post a warning Well Done !
A Romantic Heart
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10 posted 1999-10-01 07:02 PM


How about "ENTAGLED BY LOVES'PASSION"
just a suggestion! Love the passion expressed here!

Pufalove
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11 posted 1999-10-01 07:09 PM


This one knocks your lights out just thinkin'
bout it! How about "Chemical Vibrations"
That says alot about your message..Cool!

hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 1999-10-01 11:40 PM


Dark Angel, Romantic Heart and Puffalove, thank you all three for your kind words and suggestions

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.

Pepper
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13 posted 1999-10-02 02:25 AM


WOW Hoot.....WHEW......I have a suggestion for your title...how about "Loves High"

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 1999-10-02 02:49 AM


Pepper.....that's kind of funny, because I was thinking "High On Love'...thanks
johnt300
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15 posted 1999-10-02 03:05 AM


Ruth,
WOW! So few words yet so exciting. How do you do it. Always waiting for more.
Tyson.

chanelle
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16 posted 1999-10-02 12:11 PM


Lots of sensuality in this poem Hoot. Maybe you could call it " A second...An eternity"
hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 1999-10-02 01:22 PM


Tyson...it's quite easy with you as an inspiration

chanelle...thanks, nice sugestion

Christopher
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18 posted 1999-10-02 01:26 PM


Hey ruth, I have an idea for the title. How about-
"I'm jealous because you get to meet yours before I get to meet mine."

Or is that a little too long??? LOL

Well done and I agree with suthern about the loss of bresth. Very powerful collection of words here!
You need a disclaimer for those with asthma!
LOL

Chris

fatwah
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19 posted 1999-11-08 06:49 AM


sunshine,
i was actually searchng for one of your poems which michael tells me i spoke ill of. i ws glad to find this one, this is what i look to find. i love the rhyme, the stubbed and short lines i dig your grooves

fatwah
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20 posted 1999-11-08 06:51 AM


sorry hoot, mistook you for sunshine. i dig your grooves
Toerag
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21 posted 1999-11-08 07:14 AM


Nicely done Hoot.....Why don't ya name it..
"Dreaming of Tai-Bo"?.....

Moonshine
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22 posted 1999-11-08 08:37 AM


Wow Hoot,

What an awesome poem - I could almost feel the heat of the passion through the computer screen. I thought of a possible title, though it may seem strange I think it suits it. How about:

Electric Tempest

Watcher666
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23 posted 1999-11-08 10:51 AM


Wow! Loved this Hoot!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Sally S.
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24 posted 1999-11-08 11:19 PM


Whew! Ya..I think it's steamy, girl!

Ok..ok..a title is what you're searching for, I see. How about....

Passion's Symphony

hoot_owl_rn
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25 posted 1999-11-09 12:35 PM


Laughing, not sure where someone drug this up from , but thanks all for the suggestions and the comments
Skyfyre
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26 posted 1999-11-09 12:49 PM


This was dizzying! I loved it!!

How about "A moment" or "This moment" -- short and sweet, just like the poem?

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.


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