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The Walk

Moonlight walks
under a polished silver plate.

The curves of the sand
meet your feet.

Golden thunder on the fluid
air meets your ears.

Tranquility surrounds you
in a blanket,
the seagull cries “trespasser”
and flies away.

The barrier of sound is broken,
you watch the silver-steel
bird continue its journey
into darkness.

A path is lit for someone
to travel on the restless and wild
blue water.

Someone spilled sugar crystals
on the cobalt blanket above ~
and shadows are hidden as
the silver plate illuminates
them.

Circa 1968

©KRJ
28 September, 1999


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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

© Copyright 1999 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 09-28-1999 07:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful, Sunshine! Thanks for the walk!

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Denise
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You will never know how much I needed this quiet walk in the sand tonight! Thank you.
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3 posted 09-28-1999 10:11 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I feel serenity reading this work. Nice.
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Denise, Poet, Balladeer, thank you for your comments. Amazing how poetry is ageless.
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5 posted 09-29-1999 09:31 AM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Sunshine, thank you. I could smell the salt air and hear the keening of aggravated gulls.

Alicat
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Excellent imagery!!
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Thank you Ali and Hoot...I thought perhaps this would be viewed as sophomoric, but the responses say otherwise.
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very lovely Sunshine...I loved the walk too......

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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9 posted 09-29-1999 11:30 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

This poem just kind of lulls you away into a dreamstate. Love the "silver plate" imagery.

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Michael Anderson

May Darkness find you all through the day.


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Thank you Pepper, and Michael, for reading. Seeing my "old stuff" has been quite a joy!
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Sunshine,
As mellow as jello, beautiful read
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Sunshine, this is one of the best walks I've ever had!

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
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Sy, you've commented before that I'm jello ~ so now the question is asked, "what flavor?"

Thanks, Caroline, for walking with me!
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Just what a hectic day needed... lovely!
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Thank you so much suthern. I do miss the beach for the walks...and its sounds, and the salt air...
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You really know how to turn a phrase--this was lovely.
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Thank you Martie! I've enjoyed your work as well.
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Sunshine...This was a great Walk!!!!

Jenny
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