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Balladeer
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0 posted 1999-09-29 10:32 PM


If my life were one big movie
Playing on the silver screen
As if someone had followed me
Recording every scene...

Would I be proud to have it there
So grandly on display
Or would I hang my head in shame
And turn my face away?

If everyone were made aware
Of what I am inside
Would it give cause to loud applause
Or would I turn and hide?

If audiences sat and watched
The character I've been
Would they approve of how I've lived
And treated fellow men?

If they could have a chance to see
My feelings deep inside
Would they condone mistakes I've made
Or how I justified?

Would they admire my character
And think I was the best
Or just nod off and fall asleep
Through lack of interest?

The shameful things I've said and done
I'd hate for them to see.
Would faces wrinkle in disgust
To see that side of me?

Would they smile when I was happy?
Feel sad when I was down?
Laugh with me when I was funny
All the times I played the clown?

Would I come across as manly
Like a James Bond or Stallone?
Or just some poor, pathetic soul
Who's always walked alone?

What would the critics have to say
In Entertainment News?
How many stars would they reward
My life in their reviews?

Who would they get to play my part?
DeNiro - maybe Cruise
Or just some two-bit thespian
Who nothing left to lose?

How many days would "My Life" run?
A week - or, maybe, two?
Would it become a major hit
Or disappear from view?

Would I be proud to watch "My Life"
And think it turned out nice?
Or would I think it not well done,
Unworthy of the price?

There is one critic watching me.
He's watched the entire show.
Will I be worthy of His praise?
In time, He'll let me know.

© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 1999-09-29 10:40 PM


Two thumbs up!!!!!!!
Wonderful, as always.

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Michael Anderson

May Darkness find you all through the day.



Marilyn
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2 posted 1999-09-29 10:44 PM


Balladeer...amazing work here. I know the thoughts well. Thankyou for sharing this one with us.
LJA'sLorelei54
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3 posted 1999-09-29 10:50 PM


Bravo!! I'll stand up and cheer!
Pepper
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4 posted 1999-09-29 10:55 PM


soul searching and profound Sir...everytime I think I have found my favorite of your works another one comes along that I just know is my favorite again.....my favorites file is overflowing with your talent.....

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

CSwtThng
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5 posted 1999-09-29 11:07 PM


Wonderful work!!!!!!!!!!!
Balladeer
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6 posted 1999-09-29 11:14 PM


Thank you all for the rave reviews!
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7 posted 1999-09-29 11:17 PM


You ask some very thought provoking questions which shows a depth of character that, I'm sure, has led to a life not too shabbily lived! (Of course, none of us is perfect) Very well done!

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Denise

Nicole
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8 posted 1999-09-29 11:19 PM


Such thought provoking words, thank you for making me think. And I mean that in all sincerity.
WhtDove
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9 posted 1999-09-29 11:26 PM


This has to be my favorite! I don't think I have chosen one until now. It is very thought provoking. One thing I've found, if we don't always hold the interest of people, we'll always hold the interest of God. We are not worthy, but that's what Grace and Forgiveness is all about! Balladeer this is most excellent!
Nan
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10 posted 1999-09-29 11:29 PM


M&M - I'll watch your documentary anytime.....
Balladeer
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11 posted 1999-09-29 11:39 PM


Thank you, Denise. Yes. I am living proof that we are FAR from perfect.

Satiate, making someone think is the best compliment anyone can give me. Thank you.

and thank you, little dove. I'll do my best to replace it with another new favorite in the future!

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 1999-09-29 11:41 PM


Balladeer,
Just when I think you have run out of ideas,
you come up with another one. I don't know how you do it? But however I enjoy them all.
May you never run dry. Bravo for this one.

Lucie
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13 posted 1999-09-30 12:00 PM


You write this wonderful poem.. and I write about secret boxes and buckets.. I'm so ashamed.
Balladeer
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14 posted 1999-09-30 12:05 PM


Thank you, friend Sy.

Lucie, I've seen your serious side. You take a back seat to no one...and never will.

Saxoness
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15 posted 1999-09-30 01:32 AM


Balladeer,

Being a two bit thespian myself,
I would be honored to appear in the story of you life. (as long as I'm not just another sheep extra. lol)
Wonderful poem!

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot



Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
16 posted 1999-09-30 02:53 AM


Balladeer, great poem. I ofte wonder the same things about myself

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Pufalove
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17 posted 1999-09-30 03:24 AM


"HE" wrote the script, you are the player, how could he not be proud? (Especially when "HE" knows that you recognize this.)
Another very moving work!

Dark Angel
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18 posted 1999-09-30 06:42 AM


Excellent !!Balladeer, thought provoking indeed.

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Toerag
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19 posted 1999-09-30 07:12 AM


Tonight! On the big screen! The Palmetto Bug That Ate Miami! Starring Balladeer!....Okay, okay, so this was a great poem, rhymes well, great thought, good rhythm, fine message...other than that, it ain't much...LOL

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 09-30-1999).]

suthern
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20 posted 1999-09-30 07:43 AM


Yeah... what Toe said! LOL. Anyone could write like this... given pen and paper... and nothing better to do... and imagination... and the talent of Longfellow, Tennyson, Blake and Angelou all rolled into one! Well done!
LngJhnAg
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21 posted 1999-09-30 07:49 AM


'Deer

I liked the way you played off a good feature against its opposite in the same verse. I suspect a little of both exist in each of us all the time.

RainbowGirl
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22 posted 1999-09-30 07:58 AM


Let me know when it's out on video..then I can play with you all I like *g*

HUSG

ps: What you can do with my belly, I can do with your video..ROFL

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-30-1999).]

hoot_owl_rn
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23 posted 1999-09-30 08:36 AM


Excellent!!!

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.

Deb Lynne
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24 posted 1999-09-30 09:09 AM


Vacationing in the mountains must be putting you in closer touch with "higher" spirits! The air up there will do that to you! This one is simply wonderful. You're getting better with age Mr. Balladeer.
Sunshine
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25 posted 1999-09-30 09:10 AM


A movie with a message! I'm supplying the popcorn, and He's supplying the actor! That combination cannot fail.
Iloveit
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26 posted 1999-09-30 10:18 AM


wow, don't know what else I could add to all the above except my "I love it"
johnt300
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27 posted 1999-10-01 07:32 AM


Always anticipating your next. Thought provoking and thoughtful work.
Lost Dreamer
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28 posted 1999-10-01 08:33 AM


The everlasting Balladeer, the eternal thought provoker, I know God's watching you play out your scene's, and he's thinking Balladeer's a keeper for sure. Amazing you are, at least to all of us here, yet I'm sure it goes so much further then just here.
Sally S.
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29 posted 1999-10-01 08:42 AM


I always say that the past is just that.....the past. How you present yourself and what you do today is what is most important. Though, you are right.... we really only have two judges that really matter...ourself and Him.
Did I mention that this was a great poem? When you make people think....that's wonderful.

PhaerieChild
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30 posted 1999-10-01 03:58 PM


WOW!!! Very thought provoking and introspective. I think He did a great job of writing through you. You in turn are an excellent listener!! Love it!!

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If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie


Balladeer
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31 posted 1999-10-01 04:14 PM


What an incredible group you are. It is such a pleasure being part of you. Thanks to all.


Rainbow....you are something else!

RainbowGirl
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32 posted 1999-10-01 04:31 PM


ROFL...hey, less of the 'someTHING'..*g*..

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


A Romantic Heart
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33 posted 1999-10-01 07:48 PM


I think you sent me e-mail about my poem..THIEF OF MY SOUL? and requested if you could use part of it...well you have my permission to continue and use it and let me see what creation I have helped to inspire...by the way...this was a great poem!
Justbleu
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34 posted 2003-05-10 01:16 AM


A lot of honest thoughts on your life Michael.....
Well written as always!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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