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snacks
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since 1999-08-21
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NJ

0 posted 1999-08-31 07:22 AM


I can't recall the soul I lost
when summer turned to sudden frost.
Forever living in the lie
that blindness prompts the truth to die.

In the night the demon sings
a lullaby of sharp bee stings.
The clown of all my early dreams
collapses from its damaged seams.

A river washed away my past,
but in the night the dream comes fast.
Circling bees around my head;
tempted by life to pray to be dead.

Force away the hands of shame.
Grant the child one less pain.
Paying for another's sins
is a lifetime fight that no one wins.

Save the loyal, kill the rules.
Remove your child from silenced schools.
It's time we learn the crucial game
that frees us all from hands of shame.

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God is seen always in a child's eyes

© Copyright 1999 snacks - All Rights Reserved
Lucie
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077
Houston
1 posted 1999-08-31 03:28 PM


I don't know why no one replied to this poem. I liked the meter and the flow.. and the message behind it. Good work.
Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
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2 posted 1999-08-31 03:33 PM


Lucie...I agree....can't believe I missed it!!!
Elizabeth
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3 posted 1999-08-31 04:22 PM


I just found it too. We all ought to read this one and take it to heart.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."


snacks
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since 1999-08-21
Posts 35
NJ
4 posted 1999-08-31 04:38 PM


I'm glad some of you were able to read it and that it meant something. It certainly meant a lot to me when I wrote it..(a long time ago)..thanks for the feedback..
caroline
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since 1999-08-16
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5 posted 1999-08-31 06:53 PM


It's wonderful, snacks. Very well-written, and moving.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
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6 posted 1999-08-31 06:58 PM


Well, count me among the blind. Sometimes it takes time for these things to get noticed properly. This poem is great. It is polished and well written. Thank you very much.
Nan
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7 posted 1999-08-31 10:46 PM


ME TOO

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