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amber
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 240
los banos, ca,

0 posted 1999-08-31 02:23 AM


to see your eyes,
fall in disapointment,
breaks my heart,
becasue i cant stop it.

to hear your words,
sink into that voice,
my eyes close tightly,
not by choice.

to feel your touch,
run mildly cold,
sinks my soul,
with so much untold.

to watch your laughter,
slip so far away,
brings a loss of words,
and so much i cant say.

to tell you im sorry,
looses its convictions,
not replacing the mistakes,
or all the bad decisions.

to know that im wrong,
gets easier over time,
as long as your forgiveness,
is not hard to find.


© Copyright 1999 amber jean white - All Rights Reserved
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

1 posted 1999-08-31 02:25 AM


Isn't it horrible hurting someone you love? This expresses that feeling so well. I like the way you included the last verse which is hopeful. Very nice.

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 08-31-99).]

amber
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 240
los banos, ca,
2 posted 1999-08-31 02:36 AM


thank you for your kind words. it is in my point of view one of the worst feelings i have ever felt, to hurt someone that hold your heart. thanks agian for taking the time to read.
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