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Chain of Love ( dual challenge from DreamEvil )

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Lucie
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0 posted 08-30-99 02:11 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lucie

DreamEvil challenged me to write 2 poems.. one for the Adult forum titled "Chain of Lust" and one for the Open forum "Chain of Love" this was the result.

This chain of love was started
with two single golden bands.
Each circle never ending
placed upon each others hands.

A few simple words in front of God
close friends and family.
Though guests will soon forget this day
the couple holds it close in memory.

For this one moment in their lives
is the cover to their marriage book.
They will fill the pages up with love
and all the things it took.

Some books have painful chapters,
some chapters filled with love,
some just scramble through it blindly,
some use guidance from above.

The truth about the marriage book
that each of us must learn.
We’re writing a great novel
with each new page we turn.

So pen your novel wisely
and protect your chain of love.
Don’t scramble through it blindly
use some guidance from above.
© Copyright 1999 Lucille Dobbins - All Rights Reserved
Pepper
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1 posted 08-30-99 02:40 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

wonderful,Lucie! I love your idea of comparing marriage to writing a novel.

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
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2 posted 08-30-99 02:52 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Nice one, Lucie. I especially like the last two lines.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 08-30-99 03:49 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Lucie,
I've read both and I really like this one.
You have a way with words and a fine talent.
*L*
DreamEvil
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4 posted 08-30-99 05:32 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Lucie dear, I shed a tear at the heartbreak that can make such verse. Well done, I hope you find my reply to your Adult challenge as well made.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©


Lucie
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5 posted 08-30-99 06:39 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Thank you all for your responses to this poem.

DreamEvil.. thanks for the challenge. I enjoyed opening my soul to find these words.
WhtDove
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6 posted 08-30-99 08:21 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I think you have met the challenge with a work of art! I just loved it!
Balladeer
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7 posted 08-30-99 08:53 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

You DO rise to a challenge, Lucie. I admire you.
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