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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
If only you would touch your hand to my face... Push the blowing strands of hair behind my ear... And kiss me with so much love that I hear Pavarotti in my head... Like in the movies... If only you would bring to me Romance.... Wrap your arm around my waist and dance with me.... Hold me in the moonlight... If only you would look at me with those eyes that melt me so... You would give me butterflies.... If only you would find a reason to celebrate Us... And would you bring to me candle light on a checker-ed tablecloth? If only you would touch my bare arms so gently... Calming me like a cat, purring past my chair... If only you would show me such romantic love... Let me know that I complete you, just as you once completed me... If only..... if only.... ©1999 Erin Solari ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
I used to gently brush your cheek You pushed my hand away. I used to tuck behind your ear Until you cut your hair. I loved to kiss your lips But now you turn your head. I dare not bring you romance You'd likely shoot it dead. A long time now, I look at you And all I see is red, The candle burned the table cloth Because you went to bed. We used to be so passionate Until you got your kids, Since then you have no use for me I doubt you know I live. Whine not to me of days gone by, You've taken what you wanted, For me the bank is empty, I've nothing left to give. [This message has been edited by INclan (edited 08-30-99).] |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Wow! Glad my words could be of some inspiration to you, INclan! However, this was not quite the response I was looking for! lol Something more romantic maybe?  ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
I understand what you wanted...I chose to give what I get. I am glad you didn't take it wrong....keep smiling. It makes them wonder what you are up to....hehehehe. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Thank you INclan! And smile I will... ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Vividly done, dear. I can more than empathize with this piece. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Kelly Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 145 |
I loved it. It perfectly describes my own longings. (if only...... I could write like you!) |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
many people can relate to this poem. So little can express it like you have. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
A lovely piece, One Voice. I have shared such feelings. Michael |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Thank you all for your kind words! It means a lot to me... Thanks! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
A lovely, romantic piece, one voice. Superb job! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
If only ... I could write like this. I admire anyone who can write good free verse ... I am a hopeless slave to rhyme, and it gets very frustrating at times ... perhaps you could give lessons? (or pointers) I'm reading this one again ... maybe I can glean some small insight ... ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Anytime! Just get ahold of me and I would glad to! What a warm-fuzzy! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sweet |
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