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The factory

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Balladeer
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It was just a tiny factory.
Few items were displayed.
The owner was extremely proud
Of everything he made.

The orders were all custom-made
And tender, loving care
Was used in the production of
Each thing created there.

But then, somehow, the word got out
Though he didn't understand
The orders came in more and more
And things got out of hand.

The factory worked around the clock,
There were no idle hands.
Both day and night, the fires burned bright
Fulfilling all demands.

But then, one day, the owner saw
Quite visibly distressed,
That, though production was way up
The quality was less.

He'd sacrificed the workmanship;
No quality control.
Pure quantitiy became his aim.
He'd lost sight of his goal.

And so he finally slowed it down
To where it was before
So he could feel much prouder of
What passed beyond his door.

So, if you're asking, "Where's the 'deer?"
You people that I love.
He's working on your products that
He hopes he's worthy of.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Talon
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1 posted 08-29-99 07:24 PM       View Profile for Talon   Email Talon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Talon

Very good poem Balladeer. I do like the thoughts, and can understand how you feel. Maybe just write the things you feel best about and don't worry too much about the customers. Thanks for the poetry Balladeer.
Nan
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2 posted 08-29-99 08:03 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I'm right there with you Balladeer
Collecting all my wit
Sometimes it's just what we must do -
Put pieces where they fit.

Or else those silly poets might
Expect too much from this
Prolific Poets' Factory,
And then we'd seem remiss.....



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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ ˛1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75



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RainbowGirl
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3 posted 08-29-99 08:17 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Balladeer

Our emotions are our words and our words are our thoughts, our thoughts become our deeds and you talk us tenderly and lovingly through our needs...

I love the way you think..:-))

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


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4 posted 08-29-99 09:07 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank you all

Good thoughts, Nan

And, Rainbow, you are really special.....
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5 posted 08-29-99 09:20 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I know how you feel, Balladeer. I've been there myself. Thank you for posting this one.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

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Smiles....quality can't be rushed and I am very patient. Well done Balladeer
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Excellent! I agree with you! And believe me, yours are well worth the wait..and in the meantime, we can go back and reread some of your poetry if the waiting becomes to much. If you offer me Acme Chocolates everyday of the month but one and on that one day, offer me Godiva..you better believe I'm going to wait for the best!
Kelly
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8 posted 08-30-99 02:33 AM       View Profile for Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kelly

Ahhhhhh come on now! You're a natural. I think you're out partying! You should be. Enjoy yourself and have a ball. (just don't make us go through withdraws by taking to long)
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9 posted 08-30-99 08:47 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thanks, friends.

DeVine, I DO have a box of chocolates here....

and Kelly.....there's no fooling you, is there?
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10 posted 08-30-99 08:52 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Revered Elder,
This one hits home for me in many areas of my life, not just verse. Illuminating to my ruminations to say the least.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvilŠ


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You are not a factory...
you are God's gift to words.
Seymour Tabin
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Balladeer,
You dance and serve the minds of many
Who needs chocolates your poems are plenty.
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13 posted 08-30-99 11:58 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

(perk) Did someone mention Godiva chocolates? *G*

'Deer one, I don't think you need to worry about your factory turning out anything less than sheer quality... ('cept, of course, when you insist on maligning that dear Saint Toerag!) LOL
PhaerieChild
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This was very enlightening in so many ways. Par Excellence!!

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild

latearrival
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15 posted 03-22-2006 06:45 AM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

the answer to my wondering, why I haven't seen you lately.....
 
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