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To The Meek
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To The Meek |
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writer51 Junior Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 16 |
I’ve lived all my life trying to do things right Up early every morning not staying out all night I jumped when they said asked how high and where Trying hard not to hurt a soul trying to be fair But life is no bed of rambling roses And people do look down their noses Lying seems to be the winning way Your only as good as the price you can pay I go to church on Sunday raise my voice to sing Working hard for all I own and I don’t owe a thing Giving to the needy poor people on the street I have to fight the urge I feel to wash the beggars feet But the god forsaken rules just drive you down Everyone’s on the take in this two bit one horse town The fat get fatter in this kingdom of the thin While the meek stand by and watch their lives cave in |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Welcome to Passions. While I disagree with the ending sentiment...I enjoyed the verse. I think it flows well and the rhyme works. I have only one question...by who's standard do the lives of the meek cave in? Meek does not equal weak....they just seek different goals. Just something to think about. INclan |
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writer51 Junior Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 16 |
INclan What I tried to examine in this poem were the standards of someone who is trying to live life in an honest and upright manner. Who sees others living in a less than honest way getting all the rewards, this is a person questioning whether the meek will indeed inherit the earth. The first and third stanza’s showing ( or hopefully showing ) the persons attitude to life. The second and last stanza’s are the outbursts of a person trying but failing to maintain his/her moral and religious standards in the face of a falling standard of living. Thanks for the reply by the way, I hope my answer was a little clearer than my Poem…..  |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I would rather be honest than have to achieve nothing by a lie ... and I'm a romantic so believe that good will always win, just like the rainbow or love being a strength and showing a little kindness to others will always be something I do, it's in my nature...but I recognise that harshness sometimes appears to win but still I'm happy being gentle and I think you are too..:-)) HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This poem really spoke to me! Just recently, I applied for another position in our company only to lose it to a woman, who for years, terrorized her employees. I know I was as qualified as she...but they wanted to move her out of a supervisory position to this one, where all she deals with are computers. Is that fair? I am a 'yes'm' kind of employee..not making waves.....putting in 150% of myself and more often than not, being looked over for promotions! Fair? I think not. I see this kind of thing a lot... our own President lied and didn't lose anything! There, I'm getting off my soapbox. Thank you for a thought provoking poem..it's very good! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I see what you mean here, and have felt the same way! I thought you did a great job! The meek are humble in spirit. Tho evil seems to win now and is becoming more abundant, take heart my friend GOD has already overcome it! I feel to be sinking also. But the rewards later will be all worth it, you just watch. Keep that honesty and faith! They get ahead in the "wordly" but we have a much better reward that awaits us!!!! |
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writer51 Junior Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 16 |
RainbowGirl, Poet deVine and WhtDove Thank you for your considerate replies, they are very much appreciated. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
I agree with rainbow and I think that you must have a heart of gold. Granted it seems that the rich keep richer and all that but it will be those with golden hearts that win in the end. ------------------ Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild |
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