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Denise
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0 posted 08-29-99 02:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise

Behind those stark and sterile walls
Nearby those antiseptic halls
Beside that rhythmic bleeping screen
-revealing truth in blips of green
He breathed his last...there all alone
No sould around...there on his own
No special one to stay...to wait
At journey's end near heaven's gate.

Was there an anguished moment there
When tear-filled eyes were full aware
That not a soul had stayed the night
-save silent strangers clad in white
No special one to hold his hand;
Was there a fight to understand
The why of this forsaken fate
At journey's end near heaven's gate?

And as his lamp began to fade
His faithfulness...was not repaid.

More loyalty's not been displayed
Than by this soul...who'd sure have stayed.

Personal note:
Im memory of my Dad who passed away while on vacation in Florida. He was left there all alone by someone who should have stayed with him until the end.

Dad, you of all people deserved so much more.
I'll miss you and love you forever.
© Copyright 1999 Denise - All Rights Reserved
Tara Simms
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1 posted 08-29-99 03:07 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

d, you're right. nobody should have to die alone. what a tragedy.
Denise
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2 posted 08-29-99 03:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Yes, Tara, a sad way for such a wonderful guy to have to face the end. It's something that I think I will never get over. And I'll probably never look at people in the same way again. When you totally trust someone and they so shockingly let you down like this, how can you ever totally trust someone again? Thank you for your sympathy.
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3 posted 08-29-99 07:46 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

To anyone who questions why poets rhyme....this poem is the answer. You are brilliant. Thank you for your work.
Denise
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4 posted 08-29-99 08:43 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you Balladeer. I don't think I've ever been called brilliant before! I'm glad that you liked this one. It's very special to me.
Thanks again.

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Denise
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5 posted 08-29-99 11:15 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

I sympathize ... but, I am sure your father knew how you loved him even then, and that knowledge no doubt eased his journey ... this was a beautiful poem and tribute.

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


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6 posted 08-29-99 11:23 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Your poem touched me deeply (please go to the Prose Forum and read "Angel of Death"). I don't think anyone dies alone..perhaps no living person is there, but they are not alone.
Denise
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7 posted 08-29-99 11:24 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

You're right Nochtdraco, I never thought of that. What a comforting thought. Thank you so much for your insight!
Denise
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8 posted 08-29-99 11:27 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, Poet deVine, I'll do that!
Denise
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9 posted 08-29-99 11:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, Poet deVine, I'll do that!
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10 posted 08-30-99 02:22 AM       View Profile for Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kelly

I'm sorry. That must have been hard. Excellent poem. Thanks for sharing it.
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Seen from the shadows
through windows shut fast
the future is veiled
in the mists of the past
but eyes that can see
with a faith big and bold
look through the clouds
to horizons of gold...

Big wraparound HUGS to you..

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


WhtDove
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I am sorry to hear of this! I agree with deVine there in no-one is alone! Great poem, thank you for sharing with us!
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13 posted 08-30-99 09:14 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Excellent poem... But no one who is truly loved is ever completely alone... love is enhanced by togetherness, but it doesn't disappear when no one's around... it surrounds you, envelopes you and offers comfort even when those who love you aren't near. Your poem makes it clear that your dad was much loved... and I'm sure he felt that love.
Denise
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14 posted 08-30-99 03:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you Kelly,RainbowGirl,WhtDove and Suthern for your insight and comfort and for taking the time to read and comment!
HUGGS!!

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Denise
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15 posted 08-30-99 03:27 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Wow, Denise, I'm so sorry-it must have been so hard on you. I agree that someone who is loved is only physically alone and not any other way. Still, it must have been so hard to have that idea within you. Thank you so much for sharing this poem with us. I liked the rhyme and flow-they can only improve a poem. The hospital is described quite well in the first two lines-all right, I'll quit rambling.

Love,

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."



[This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 08-30-99).]
Denise
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Thank you Elizabeth for the kind comments. I'm glad that you liked it.
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how painful...I share it with you
 
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