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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
With a million miles between us and a pen within my hand I write to you a letter, my friend in distant land. I often wonder how you are and hope you're doing fine I'll tell you that I miss you, dearest friend of mine. The last time that I saw you was so very long ago And I regret that night much more than you could ever know. I had absolutely no idea that not once more would I see Your face, and how was I to know that you would leave me? I refused to make eye contact and to you I would not speak. We haven't been together since that night that fateful week. I miss you now so very much-will I see you again? I'll have to find a way to cope without you until then. Once again, my friend, I miss you, and I'm sorry for that night. If I had known it was the last, I would not have tried to fight. I guess I had to let you know that you are my best friend And with these feelings in the open, I can now begin to mend. Love, me ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." [This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 08-29-99).] |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
getting things out...even in writing is usually a good thing. I liked the rhyme and I liked the meter. Nice job. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Thanks INclan. I am glad you liked it!  By the way, everyone, do you think I should add one more verse, or is it okay as is? I'm working on a few more lines and they aren't coming.------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." [This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 08-28-99).] |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
touching..I think it is great just the way it is...the last line was a perfect ending ------------------ Shannon |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Touching indeed, I agree with pepper. Its great the way it is |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
nice one, I think we all have people to whom we should write letters of apology to. This one fits me in a way! Izzy |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Elizabeth, this is very touching ... does not need an additional verse ... but should you add one, well, I'm sure it will only get better ... thanks again |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Pepper, Izzy, Dark Angel, and Traveler: a great big "thank you" to y'all for your comments. I think I will skip on that last verse, it's still not coming (darn ol' writer's block). I really appreciate your encouraging words. Thanks again! ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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