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Waiting At The Temple

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caroline
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0 posted 08-28-99 09:20 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for caroline

I wanted to tell the world
how much I loved you
but your name was
unknown
I erected anonymous
monuments to you
and gained the praise
of many who did not
understand
I did not want your praise
your love would have been
enough…so told
with your touch
but withheld like
heroin to an addict who
kills the beast
but wants its soul
and you departed with
mine in hand
I threw my anger
at your back and
built a temple of
disillusion in your honor
And now you have come
to inspect it … you
walk tentatively through
the door, my heart
stands still
when you greet me
and in wretched silence
I wait
for your next word

caroline
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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
© Copyright 1999 Caroline - All Rights Reserved
Skyfyre
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since 08-15-99
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1 posted 08-28-99 02:55 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Freeverse is not something that I feel qualified to evaluate ... but I thought this was put together very well ... the lines flowed nicely and the thoughts came through clearly ... I like!

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


WhtDove
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2 posted 08-28-99 03:52 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I liked this!
Balladeer
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3 posted 08-28-99 04:11 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

very intricately woven. The phrasing is beautiful and the thought....provoking.
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