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The Brother I Never Knew

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 08-28-99 05:56 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

A child you were that died aborning,
flesh of my flesh you are my brother still.
You left me alone one cold June morning,
leaving a hole that no one else can fill.

For five months we grew under mother's heart,
sharing as we do but a single soul.
Losing you also tore mother apart,
her body will never again be whole.

Sixteen weeks more inside mother I grew,
turning, dying and feeling out of place.
Even then brother I was missing you,
as I do when I look at my own face.

By dry delivery mother was scarred,
knowledge that drove mother and father wild.
Their outlooks on the future were both marred,
seems never again could they have a child.

For weeks I lay in an incubator,
a sickly child that was weak and frail.
Every new breath I took would elate her,
as mother had no doubt life would prevail.

Through the trials of my life you were there,
an unseen prescence that kept me from harm.
You saw me through the worst of my despair,
becoming the source of my present charm.

Brother, I'm sorry you had no name,
it tears at my heart if the truth be told.
Here though my brother is my deepest shame,
I knew you not til twenty-six years old.

Mother said that you just never came up,
undoubtedly that sentiment is true.
Since that time bitter tears have filled my cup,
cried for you,the brother I never knew.


©1999 DreamEvil



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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©




[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 08-28-99).]
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Poet deVine
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1 posted 08-28-99 06:00 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I like this very much except some minor phrase problems.


[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 08-28-99).]
Dark Angel
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2 posted 08-28-99 06:01 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh god, This is beautiful, Dream.
absolutley moving. I feel your pain .
caroline
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3 posted 08-28-99 10:02 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

Quite stirring...very beautiful sentiments.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Gentle Soul
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4 posted 08-28-99 11:07 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

Wow dream.. this is very moving! I love it big brother..

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5 posted 08-28-99 11:13 AM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

This was a tear-jerker Dream....But I loved it.
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 08-28-99 12:30 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

And because she could have no retrieval
She adopted the name of DreanEvil.
Wonderful piece of work.
WhtDove
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7 posted 08-28-99 03:46 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Glad to see you decided to do this! I have tears runnin buddy! I knew you could do it. This was beautiful. What a loving tribute!
I'm proud of you!!!!
wayoutwalt
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8 posted 08-28-99 09:26 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

yuh whuts the deal why isnt this on the top huh pretty durn good it is lets do some kinda poem crowd surfin and keep it on top for evermore
Tara Simms
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Very moving tribute to the brother you never knew. I once knew a guy who also lost his twin. I don't think he'll ever feel whole without him.
Michael
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10 posted 08-28-99 10:17 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow,
This one cuts preety deep, DreamEvil.
I can almost feel the longing you have for him in your words. You've portrayed this one very well. Great work.


Michael
Nicole
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11 posted 08-28-99 10:23 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

I have to agree with everyone, very well done DE. I could 'feel' this poem, and that is impressive.

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"Grief can take care of itself, but to get the full value of joy you must have somebody to divide it with." *Mark Twain*
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12 posted 08-29-99 02:15 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

So deeply painful, Dream...wonderful sentiments, though. I also truly felt this piece..exellent work.

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller


Dark Angel
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13 posted 08-29-99 05:29 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

I agree with walt...Lets keep it up there. This should not be missed!!!
Dark Angel
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14 posted 08-29-99 05:32 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Sending this back to the top

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 08-29-99).]
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WhtDove
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Back to the TOP!!!!
hoot_owl_rn
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Dream.....this is absolutely beautiful. You have portrayed both your and your mothers pain so vividly it hurts to read it. You are a master
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18 posted 08-29-99 10:01 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I could feel it, DE, so sorry for the loss of your brother.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

~one voice~
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19 posted 08-30-99 12:02 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Dream, I realize this poem may have been very hard for you to write. I cannot imagine how it must feel. However, I do know the feeling of living and feeling like a part of you is missing. I know what it's like to go through life trying to fill that void. I know what it's like when you can't find anything that fills it. To write about it shows your strength in facing something that hurts terribly. I hope that you hold on to this one, Dream... This poem is a very important part of YOU.

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


Dark Angel
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sending this back up
Dark Angel
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back to the top
Skyfyre
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22 posted 12-17-1999 03:45 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

This was enchanting in its entirety, but I must say the thing that captivated me most was the mention of a shared soul.

You delved deep for this.  Exquisite.

--Kess


 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

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