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once
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0 posted 08-27-99 08:39 PM       View Profile for once   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for once

Childish tears brushed away...
a pat on the bottom,
I'm off to play.
catching fireflies in a jar,
laughing, silly
mom's not far
calls us in for one last treat,
makes us clean our filthy feet
smiles and hugs
kisses goodnight,
this was my childhood,
full of delight

Years pass by and mom is ill
it's my turn now to foot the bill
I wipe her mouth
I comb her hair
I still see the beauty there.
Days to months...
months to years...
I grow weary, shed my tears
can't hope she'll stay
her pains too real
I wonder into which night she'll steal?
Finally her relief comes
and i find My grief just begun
for these last years
as I grew weary
my memories faded, became quite bleary.
I forgot to remember the joy I had
I let her down, and also dad.
so one last time brush away my tears,
hold my hand, and quiet my fears
let me pass this night in rest
and believe i failed not this final test
© Copyright 1999 once - All Rights Reserved
Nikita
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1 posted 08-27-99 09:34 PM       View Profile for Nikita   Email Nikita   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Nikita

U've hit upon a seldomly expressed truth: Many survivors of those loved ones who've passed, feel they have failed them n some way. Well done.

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Nan
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2 posted 08-27-99 09:36 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I do think you passed - Keep on posting, please?..
doreen peri
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3 posted 08-28-99 07:54 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

One of the most difficult times in a persons life-- taking care of a parent as they die -- trying to remember how they took care of you. And your poem relays that so well. Hats off to you for so clearly stating the dilemma and pain of this experience.

dp
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4 posted 08-28-99 09:52 AM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

You've done a lovely job expressing such a difficult situation. I want you to know that by taking care of your mom, you passed the test. Go to any nursing home, you will see the moms that never have visitors, though they have many children. It is very wearying to take care of an ill parent. The emotional stress is harder than the physical. Seems to me you aced the test, dear Good writing. Thanks for sharing it.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
Skyfyre
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5 posted 08-28-99 02:40 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

There was no failure, here ... touching and well written.

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


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6 posted 08-28-99 03:57 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Welcome! This was very well written. Indeed a difficult subject to be addressed. You did more than most would have, you took care of her! God Bless you for that! I hope to see more of your work. Thanks for sharing such a heartfelt emotion with us.
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7 posted 08-28-99 04:03 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Welcome, once! I hope to se more of your work. This one was great-glad you posted it! Very sad though. I'm sure if your mom could read it, she'd love it, and tell you that you passed. Thanks for sharing.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."
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8 posted 08-28-99 05:56 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Sometimes we have to accept that we can do no more than what we've done... You did your best, you showed your love... and your love still shines through this poem... Great job!
once
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9 posted 08-28-99 07:30 PM       View Profile for once   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for once

Thanks for all the encouraging and kind
words.
 
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