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Dying Alone

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Mona Lisa
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0 posted 08-26-99 02:20 PM       View Profile for Mona Lisa   Email Mona Lisa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mona Lisa

He lay trapped inside, crying and afraid
his body in pain, his chances outweighed

His pleas for help falling on deaf ears,
no one around to wipe his tears

But through his anguish, his memory travels
while the fate of his destiny slowly unravels

Though his body is weak, his mind remembers
as he struggles to rekindle the dying embers

Of a life once vibrant, now fading to its doom
sealing its fate in a metal tomb

Cut short all at once by a screech and a crash
on his brow, the etchings a fatal gash

Blood spilling ferociously inside and out
his last hopes fading beyond any doubt

If only he had known what lay ahead,
he might have slowed down, and not have sped

But it was too late for regrets, to late for laments
too late to undo this turn of events

His cries for help lay still unheeded,
as the truth of his fate he now conceded

In no time it seemed, his cries for help faded
the last of his strength now spent and abated

Now quiet and still, down a long dark zone
lay the shell of one soul who had died alone.
© Copyright 1999 Mona Lisa - All Rights Reserved
miriam
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1 posted 08-26-99 02:37 PM       View Profile for miriam   Email miriam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miriam

i don't understand why no one has responded to your poetry?? I thought it was great. People like poetry that comes from a fantasy world. You're poem is real and it woke me up. Thank you for remindind me that life is precious.
Mona Lisa
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2 posted 08-26-99 02:42 PM       View Profile for Mona Lisa   Email Mona Lisa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mona Lisa

Wow. Thank you so much for your kind compliments. I am so glad to hear that it had a positive effect on you.

Actually, I just posted this maybe twenty minutes ago as it just came to me out of the blue
Pepper
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3 posted 08-26-99 02:43 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

extraordinary!

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miriam
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4 posted 08-26-99 02:44 PM       View Profile for miriam   Email miriam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miriam

i didn't even check the date in your poem. I think that destiny put this poem in my path. you have a gift.
Mona Lisa
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5 posted 08-26-99 02:47 PM       View Profile for Mona Lisa   Email Mona Lisa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mona Lisa

If you could see me right now.....Im flushing at your comments. Thank you : )
miriam
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6 posted 08-26-99 02:50 PM       View Profile for miriam   Email miriam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miriam

it never hurts to make a heart smile.
Mona Lisa
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7 posted 08-26-99 06:01 PM       View Profile for Mona Lisa   Email Mona Lisa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mona Lisa

Thank you again.
 
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