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Girl With The Misty Eyes (Craig's Challenge)

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Poet deVine
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She lay alone amid the tangle
the girl with the misty eyes
broken in body, a lifeless spirit
‘the passenger always dies’

Pulled along just for a ride
she sat in front next to Ned
six teens out for a little fun
now five of them lay dead

A soft drizzle begins to fall
flashing red lights draw near
reflections of life still remain
in that one crystal tear

Life, so fragile, ebbs away
no one can stop it’s flow
rain glistens in misty eyes
that held a young girl’s glow
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caroline
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1 posted 08-25-99 09:31 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

This is so haunting...an excellent poem, sad though it is.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
WhtDove
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2 posted 08-25-99 10:59 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

This was a sad one! Well written.
Alwye
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3 posted 08-26-99 12:34 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

So very sad...exquisitely written, Miss deVine..I'm left in awe of your talent.

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller


Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


4 posted 08-26-99 12:53 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Haunting melody here... chills!

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Everyone has a photographic memory...
...most of us just don't have film!
Dark Angel
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5 posted 08-26-99 03:12 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Poet, this poem is excellent. so very sad. I always look forward to reading your works
Dragoness
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6 posted 08-26-99 04:00 AM       View Profile for Dragoness   Email Dragoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dragoness's Home Page   View IP for Dragoness

Hauntly beautiful.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.
Michael
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7 posted 08-26-99 04:16 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Excellent as always Ms. DeVine.

Michael
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You did an excellent job with this one. I'd like to see it in the newsletter for MADD...I think it would be perfect. Sad, but so hauntingly true.
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9 posted 08-26-99 12:20 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Well done!!!
Craig
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10 posted 08-26-99 12:48 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

Well Miss deVine seems like you’ve gone and done it again, every time we swap challenges it always seems to be you that produces the best work. Another excellent response to a challenge. (let me know when you start giving lessons)
Mona Lisa
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A beautiful account of the fragility of life.
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America the beautiful


12 posted 08-26-99 01:11 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Nothing much to say but "Wow"-so sad.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."
 
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