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hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA


0 posted 08-25-99 12:04 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nothing

I don't want you to be my saviour
shed your blood on a cross of words
for our sins

I don't want your sympathy
given out like candy on the street
I am not a child

I don't want your gift of love
laid out in sacrifice upon the alter
like a slaughtered lamb

I don't want to feel
your tainted kisses burn upon my skin
with passions fire

I don't want your heart
sliced open coldly with the precision
of a surgeons scalpel

I don't want the lies
you told that tore my soul apart
and left me bleeding

I have asked nothing of you
but to give of yourself
yet, you give me nothing

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 08-25-99).]

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 08-25-99).]
© Copyright 1999 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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since 06-22-99
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TEXAS (it's all big)


1 posted 08-25-99 12:07 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

woah you speak from your soul hoot and that whats make you so good
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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Glen Hope, PA USA


2 posted 08-25-99 12:24 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Walt...thank you. I wrote this right on the forum this morning. It is a bit darker than my normal poems, maybe due to my mood lately, but it also felt great to write it. I must say, I shocked myself.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
Seymour Tabin
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since 07-07-99
Posts 32119
Tamarac Fla


3 posted 08-25-99 03:50 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Hoot,
Them's powerfull words
Nice job.
INclan
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since 07-20-99
Posts 1046
Indiana, USA


4 posted 08-25-99 04:05 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Hmmmmmmmmm.....

If I understand this correctly, I believe my response should be:

Bite Me...
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 08-25-99 04:56 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Seymore, yes the words are powerful, maybe a bit stronger than I'd like them to be

Inclain....bite me??? I'm afraid this poem had nothing to do with you or anyone else here in the forum...in fact it was written based on my marrige with my ex-husband. He pratronized me for 17 years and always gave just enough to bait me, but never anymore than what he had to. To quote Martina McBride "he'd give a little and take it back," but never the real him, the only thing I ever asked for. This poem is all about offering up things because the person thinks they must and never giving of ones self because you truly want to. I'm very sorry if I somehow offended you with this piece, it was not meant to do so. My appologizes, but I do have to wonder why it elicited such a strong response from you?
Ruth

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
DreamEvil
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since 06-22-99
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6 posted 08-25-99 05:25 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Ruth,
Knowing you as I do, this makes perfect sense to me. I'm surprised at your darker turn, but I value this piece more for that reason.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvilŠ


INclan
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Posts 1046
Indiana, USA


7 posted 08-25-99 06:06 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Dear Hoot_Owl_RN,

I was not offended in anyway by your well written verse. The response was more of sarcastic humor, than anything else. I will be happy to discuss my "strong" response via email if you would like. We are more alike than you might understand. I am truly grieved by your past situation. Interesting...I am also in the 17th year.

Respectfully,
INclan
caroline
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8 posted 08-25-99 06:54 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

ms. hoot_owl I LOVE this poem. There is nothing like telling it like it is! Damn all the innuendoes and coy games...you've cut right through it and stated your feelings well. Great job on this. I enjoyed reading it.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...
hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA


9 posted 08-25-99 07:38 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Dream...thank you, that means a great deal to me. For once, the anger felt good, as you can well understand it might at this point in my life. Better the darkness out than in as it has been for so long.

Inclan...my sincere appologizes, thanks for your reresponse and even more your personal explanation. I agree with your comment Bite me...there was many a time I mumbled that phrase under my breath as well as a lot of other, maybe not so mild, phrases.

Caroline...Thank you. I went along time beating around bushes and never really expressing what was truly on my mind. Although this is a little stong for me, it also I believe shows that I am overcoming a great deal of the past by being able to release these emotions. To me, this is almost a milestone.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
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