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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Nothing I don't want you to be my saviour shed your blood on a cross of words for our sins I don't want your sympathy given out like candy on the street I am not a child I don't want your gift of love laid out in sacrifice upon the alter like a slaughtered lamb I don't want to feel your tainted kisses burn upon my skin with passions fire I don't want your heart sliced open coldly with the precision of a surgeons scalpel I don't want the lies you told that tore my soul apart and left me bleeding I have asked nothing of you but to give of yourself yet, you give me nothing ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 08-25-99).] [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 08-25-99).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
woah you speak from your soul hoot and that whats make you so good |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Walt...thank you. I wrote this right on the forum this morning. It is a bit darker than my normal poems, maybe due to my mood lately, but it also felt great to write it. I must say, I shocked myself. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, Them's powerfull words Nice job. |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Hmmmmmmmmm..... If I understand this correctly, I believe my response should be: Bite Me... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore, yes the words are powerful, maybe a bit stronger than I'd like them to be Inclain....bite me??? I'm afraid this poem had nothing to do with you or anyone else here in the forum...in fact it was written based on my marrige with my ex-husband. He pratronized me for 17 years and always gave just enough to bait me, but never anymore than what he had to. To quote Martina McBride "he'd give a little and take it back," but never the real him, the only thing I ever asked for. This poem is all about offering up things because the person thinks they must and never giving of ones self because you truly want to. I'm very sorry if I somehow offended you with this piece, it was not meant to do so. My appologizes, but I do have to wonder why it elicited such a strong response from you? Ruth ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Ruth, Knowing you as I do, this makes perfect sense to me. I'm surprised at your darker turn, but I value this piece more for that reason. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Dear Hoot_Owl_RN, I was not offended in anyway by your well written verse. The response was more of sarcastic humor, than anything else. I will be happy to discuss my "strong" response via email if you would like. We are more alike than you might understand. I am truly grieved by your past situation. Interesting...I am also in the 17th year. Respectfully, INclan |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
ms. hoot_owl I LOVE this poem. There is nothing like telling it like it is! Damn all the innuendoes and coy games...you've cut right through it and stated your feelings well. Great job on this. I enjoyed reading it. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Dream...thank you, that means a great deal to me. For once, the anger felt good, as you can well understand it might at this point in my life. Better the darkness out than in as it has been for so long. Inclan...my sincere appologizes, thanks for your reresponse and even more your personal explanation. I agree with your comment Bite me...there was many a time I mumbled that phrase under my breath as well as a lot of other, maybe not so mild, phrases. Caroline...Thank you. I went along time beating around bushes and never really expressing what was truly on my mind. Although this is a little stong for me, it also I believe shows that I am overcoming a great deal of the past by being able to release these emotions. To me, this is almost a milestone. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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